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Post by Jack Jefferson on Nov 9, 2006 19:44:55 GMT -5
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Post by Karate Master Kudo on Nov 10, 2006 11:17:11 GMT -5
A nice solid match.
I liked the descriptions of their facial expressions throughout the match, it really gave a more intimate mood when you can see what they're feeling as well. A great display of heelishness from Jefferson throughout, especially the opening slap sequence which really drew me in.
On a more personal level I'd like to see perhaps some more crowd reaction descriptions. A big part of a match is the crowd, and I like knowing how the hot/cold the crowd is during various parts of the match. It could even help stress certain parts of your match if used well. For example "That was awesome!" chants can really give a reader the idea that the move just done was really over the top that they may have missed between the lines.
On another note, I also liked the switch between numerical values (1,2,3 etc) with worded numbers. (ONE, TWO, THREE etc)
This especially worked well when the near fall at the end of the match came. The caps really gave it that effect that it was going to be the end, until BAM, kickout. Haha, just another personal preference I suppose.
All in all though, I enjoyed it, great job Jack.
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Post by The Senator on Nov 10, 2006 12:26:45 GMT -5
Easily, the match of the show. Very well done, I want you guys to write more tag stuff:)
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