Rose Promo Topic

[Shawn]

This is the official Rose Promo Topic. Grade my promos accordingly and point out areas of improvement. Do not point out typos or grammatical errors because they are usually found by me. Here is the 1st one of for debate

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(Yoko wrote her own lines, but the general idea of the promo and where it goes is my idea.)

For in much wisdom is much grief: and he that increaseth knowledge increaseth sorrow.
--Ecclesiastes 1:18, The Holy Bible

There is a thick humidity that infests the very heart of the Okinawa branch of the ACW arena. It causes most people to scurry around whatever air conditioner or fan that they can find. This heat causes the most basic of human emotions to emerge with a vengeance and tensions in the locker room rise to new heights. People are quick to lash out at one another and there have been quite a few arguments and/or fights between even the common members of the crew. It is a bit different in the locker room of Yoko Satoshi, she is used to the humidity that comes with this time of year and she also enjoys the luxury of a nicely equipped locker room that suits her role as the hometown hero. She is already dressed and she is starting to prepare mentally for her title match later in the evening, but this is all smashed as she hears a knocking at her mock wooden chamber door.

Yoko: Who is it?

An all too familiar voice responds with in a kind tone

??: Oh, just a friend…<br>
Yoko quickly opens the door, but she already knows who is behind it. The door swings open with a rushed excitement. Yoko’s eyes open with surprise and just a bit of worry.

Yoko: Rose?

Yoko sees none other that Alexandra “White Rose” Kaesar standing in the doorway with a strangely pleasant expression on her face. She looks to be very upbeat in her first appearance since the Fallen Heros event.

Rose: Hello Yoko, it seems like it’s been forever…<br>
Yoko: Hello Rose…….where have you been? Nobody has seen or heard from you in weeks.

Rose: Ah, I’ve just been getting my head on straight, that’s all. I needed some time alone to do a little soul searching.

They both move towards the center of the room and then they sit down in two folding chairs that are conveniently facing one another. They both sit and begin to catch up on lost time.

Yoko: So exactly where have you been?

Rose: Well, I visited my family for the first time in a long time. It was so long ago when I basically disowned them

Yoko: …..

Rose: Well, the only thing I can say is that it didn’t go as bad as I thought it would. My mother spent a good hour berating me about certain uh, choices, I have made in the past few years and my father threatened to disown me in return for all the heartbreak I have caused them. I suppose I deserved to get yelled at, but they have forgiven me now and I am thankful for that. Ah, I have forgotten to ask about your family, how is the Satoshi family doing?

Yoko: Things are patched up between Yuki and I. They're not perfect with my parents, but no one hates me anymore. At least not like they did, and would have, if not for Alicia.

Rose: You would have had a family no matter the outcome of that situation. Either your own, or me.

Yoko: I don't see you that way anymore, Rose. You would have let me go through with that act, and then you just abandoned me.

Rose does look like this statement hurts her a great deal, but she does realize some of the truth in what Yoko has just said

Rose: I probably deserve that, but It's in the past now. Never mind it…. Well, uh, I see that you still have the world championship.

Yoko: Yeah... I'm not sure if I'm still deserving, but I still have it. It's fun being champion, anyway.

Rose: The belt was important to me, too, once. But I realized it was just that, a belt. Maybe you should let it go? All it causes as unnecessary heartbreak

Yoko: Nah. I'll let it go when it's gone, not before. Not like you. I have a duty as world champion to defend it.

Rose is silent for a moment.

Rose: I think it's time you left ACW.

Yoko: ....What?

Rose: You have everything that anybody would desire. You have a family that loves you dearly and that is something that I have not really had in years. You have your youth which is something to be truly cherished, not wasted in this horrendous puppet show called ACW. Just look at yourself Yoko…..

Rose points to a faint scar on Yoko’s cheek that was caused so long ago, just for the sake of “enlightenment”<br>
Rose: That’s what I did you to you and that’s what people like me will do to you in the world. The guilt of what happened that night will never leave me. I have had nightmares about what happened for weeks and weeks now. Only, this time, something is different about the entire scenario. In the nightmare, I am always the victim and you are more terrible that I could have ever been. That was our goal after all, to make you greater than the both of us. Yoko, it’s not too late to rebuild you life, please just relinquish that damn title and leave ACW.

There is a tense silence for a while as Yoko thinks over hear words and it seems as even this cool room is losing the battle with humidity. Rose stares into Yoko’s eyes, almost as if she is trying to see what her decision is before it is made, but to no avail. Rose is eyes glimmer intensely and it is apparent that she is determined to get Yoko to leave ACW.

Yoko: Rose, I am happy in ACW and I am not going to turn out like you or Ridley. Whatever influences you once had don’t control me anymore. I am my own person now and I can live as I see fit. I understand how you feel, but I cannot leave.

Rose’s head hangs down low and her anger can be felt, but she suddenly looks up at Yoko and she responds to her decision in a strange manner

Rose: Yoko, you know things now and they are things that nobody should know, much less somebody at your age. You’ve been……enlightened, no, cursed by Ridley and I. You mind has been warped by our influences and it is my now my duty to save you from sharing my fate. You are young…you can change. I want to save you and most of all I want to find forgiveness.

Yoko: Rose, Its OK, I am fine and I forgive you.

Rose: It’s not your forgiveness I seek. I don’t want nor expect to get your forgiveness. Yoko…. I have done so many thing…….very terrible things. I used to think that there would be no way to atone for my sins…..

Rose trails off and it seems like she is slowly weighing a decision within her mind. Yoko is listening intently at what Rose is saying and the conversation is reaching it’s apex

Rose: …But I have found a way to atone for my sins. I will undo all the damage I have caused, no matter what it takes. I will stop Ridley’s plans and I will make it so that he cannot hurt or corrupt anyone again. Only then will God forgive me and I will finally be redeemed in his eyes. So, Yoko, leave this horrible business and go home to your family. Please….just go home, I only want what is best for you.

Rose pleads into Yoko’s eyes and smiles at Yoko. Rose slowly rises from her chair as she awaits Yoko’s reply. Yoko takes a few minutes to seriously think this over and Rose smiles more, she is sure that she has convinced Yoko

Yoko: Rose…. ..I have to make my own choices in life.

Rose’s expression suddenly darkens and she slaps Yoko open handed across her cheek. Rose speaks in a low voice and it sounds a bit sad

Rose: I didn’t ask you…..

Rose’s voice hardens and all her feelings are shot towards Yoko

Rose: Yoko, I am telling you to get out of here and go home!

Yoko lightly touches the cheek that Rose just slapped. Her face reddens and she silently grits her teeth at Rose. The slap has only served to enrage Yoko, but she does not strike back at her. Yoko slowly rises from her chair and stares Rose straight in the eye

Yoko: No!

Rose does not hesitate upon slapping Yoko again and this one is substantially harder. Rose quietly assures her self that this is for Yoko’s own good. Rose yells at Yoko and her voice is best described as a mix of sadness and anger.

Rose: Yoko, I will do whatever I have to do to get you out of ACW. Don’t make me do what I don’t want to do. Go home and never return.

Yoko: No!

Yoko has finally had enough and she bursts forward in rage. Rose quickly dodges from an oncoming punch from Yoko and knees her hard in the stomach. Yoko lets out an injured gasp and clutches her stomach. Rose wastes no time in flipping Yoko over to her back, thereby knocking the remaining air out of her lungs. Yoko gasps for air on the ground as Rose speaks to her softly.

Rose: I am very sorry that I have angered you Yoko. You have forced my hand against you and that is really your fault. You are too angry now to think clearly, so I suppose I will see you another time. I will give you one last chance to give in and retire peacefully, but after that……. Well, I would then have to force you out of ACW. I don’t want to do that Yoko, but if you leave me with no other choice then you will have forced my hand once again. I don’t want to hurt you again, but I will if I have too.. Please, think of yourself, think of your family, and most importantly, think of me. You will not only be saving your own soul by you retirement, in a small way, you will help save mine. Please, don’t be selfish, this entire ordeal is much larger than you. Until next time Yoko……God bless you.

Yoko(Gasping): I won't leave...

Yoko is slowly getting air to get back into her lungs, but she is still coughing a great deal. Rose then calmly walks out the door and shuts it behind her, leaving Yoko unsure of whether she heard her last defiance, and to get ready for her match and to organize her thoughts.

[hunter]

It's a good promo, one of your better ones if that's not too bold. Overall, I'd give it an A-. I adore the first paragraph, though.

[Shawn]

Revelations: Rose, Wyvern(his lines), Ridley(his promo)


----------- What though the field be lost?
All is not lost; the unconquerable Will,
And the study of revenge, immortal hate,
And courage never to submit or yield:
And what is else not to be overcome?
That Glory never shall his wrath or might
Extort from me.

------ Satan, Paradise Lost



There is an odd thing about tears, we shed them only when we don’t want them. Alexandra "The White Rose" Kaesar is not very accustomed to her own tears. While she has always been a very emotional person, sadness was never really her most prevalent emotion. She has shown anger quite often and she has also shown her potential to love, but never has she shown fully her potential for sadness We have seen glimpses of her sadness the horrible night that Ridley died and on a few occasions when it appeared as if he was doomed to exile forever. Its ironic that now his very existence causes her sadness on the night when she was told that answers would come. A short three days ago marked her thirtieth birthday and it was an occasion that she "celebrated" alone. Her family did make courtesy calls, but they have long been too ashamed of her to fully embrace her like they did in her youth. Tonight, Rose sits in front of a simple television and she watches the events that caused her to fall to her lowest of lows. She watches the match with quite a bit of shame, a shame that is enhanced when she realizes just how much she enjoyed it. She sees her fatal mistake and how Ridley over came her dominance and won the day. Then she listens for the part that is completely alien to her. Her tears do not stop flowing from her eyes and the fact that she this causes her a bit of shame as well. We now see Rose more human than we probably have ever seen her and it is a part of her that she doesn’t want us to see.


Ridley: Ah, Alexandra...what can I say, really? Hopefully, when you wake up, the camera crew will give you a copy of this so you can understand what's just happened...

He pauses to cough, several rivulets of blood trailing down his chin, before continuing with a characteristically intense stare.

Ridley: It seems that, in your desperation to spit on everything you've ever stood for, you also threw away all that I taught you. A pity...it would've been useful for you to remember that, no matter how high you thought the deck was stacked in your favor, I had my ways of overcoming. To remember that, for every blow, for every strike, I'd continue to harness the pain coursing through my arteries, and to remember that when it finally exploded after all the buildup...you'd stand no chance.

*Rose cries with a renewed zeal and she soon tastes her own tears. She did forsake some of the things that he had taught her and she manages to feel the guilt that all traitors feel. Everything was in her favor, but she let her vanity and her pride cost her the match.*

Ridley: But you were consumed with blind rage, and nothing I'd taught you mattered, Alexandra. You failed to remember the simplest of things: I MADE YOU. I found you in the Midwest two years ago, struggling to make yourself in any way noticeable, and I turned you into a killing machine, just like I WAS doing with Yoko before you and the woman you've turned into before my eyes RUINED her.

*Again, Ridley manages to make Rose feel like the betrayer, but she does maintain that she was just in her actions. Rose is only just beginning to realize how much of her has been made by Ridley and sometimes she even wonders if her thoughts are her own. She does take a little comfort in wondering just how much of herself is still within him. Yet, nothing seems to make her tears stop*

Ridley: And yet...I found that, like so many other times, my trust was hugely misplaced. Odd how that seems to happen; you can't trust anybody if you can't trust your bride, eh?....It's a pity. I thought I'd finally found somebody with whom I could connect, with whom I could share everything, all the thoughts, the hopes, the dreams, the rage....but no. Shame. Pouring out my soul's never been something I've ever been inclined to do anyway...although annihilating people is.

*Rose knows just how deeply they connected and just how much they trusted one another long ago. A strange mixture of Ridley’s spoken truth and her own romanticized nostalgia make her more and more emotional. The tears flow freely and her eyes are very, very red by this point*

Ridley: But there's no need for that, not anymore...for once in my life, I don't think I've got the spine to finish you off. Yours wasn't even the Luciferean vanity of seeking to replace me; you simply wanted to erase me from the earth, which I suppose I can respect without much personal offense. Consider yourself fortunate, Alexandra, perhaps I'm too dependent on the memory of what we once had to go any further than this. But make no mistake...it's over. We're over. Pain Incorporated is over. And I belong to no one once again.

*When he had his chance to end her career, or worse, he did something that she hadn’t calculated on, he showed her mercy. She would rather that he had killed her then than show her such mercy. It makes her feel so ungrateful and she then realizes just how much he loved her and just how much she loved him. She begins to blame herself. The Executor promised her that her confusion would begin its end after her match with Ridley and it appears that he lied to her. She has nothing left in the world and most of all nothing left in ACW. Finally, through her uncontrollable sobbing, she speaks in a low and sad voice*

Rose: It’s……over…..

*She then starts to completely break down emotionally. Her sobbing becomes loud and erratic and she buries her face in her hands. She does not hear her door open and close as quietly as it opened.*

?: Rose?

*Rose is startled by the voice and she quickly wipes her tears away and puts on a visage of invulnerability. She turns and she sees Wyvern standing in front of her door with a worried look on his face. It becomes apparent that he can see through her "mask" and even though she realizes this, she keeps it on anyway*

Rose: Oh, Wyvern…… What is it?

*She knows exactly what it is, but goes through the ceremonies anyway*

Wyvern: I just came to check up on you after your match……

*He looks for the proper words*

Wyvern: I...I...I know how hard the loss must have been for you.

*Her eyes affirm just how hard it was.*

Rose: I lost everything Wyvern….. I have nothing left. I’ve lost the only man I ever truly loved, I’ve lost my pride, and I don’t see any reason to go on anymore.

*Wyvern is saddened by her sadness and responds*

Wyvern: Rose, I know its hard for you to let go of him, but you have to let go... It wasn't meant to for you two to be. You haven’t lost anything, in fact, you’ve gained freedom from his ways. You aren’t alone either, there are still people in ACW who care about you. Rose, if you ever need anything, no matter what it is, I am always here to help. I want to see you overcome this….

Rose: Why is that?

Wyvern: If you can overcome this, than I know that it is possible to overcome anything. I know you can do it.

Rose: I cannot….

*Rose finally loses control of her emotions again and to her shame sobs loudly right in front of Wyvern. He is troubled by this and is not quite sure what to do.*

Wyvern: Rose, it's------

*Rose, in her emotionally vulnerability, suddenly latches upon Wyvern and hugs him very tightly. Wyvern looks startled and is stunned for a second as he listens to her cry and as he feels her embrace. Finally, as a friendly gesture he returns it and comforts her in her hour of need. Rose is usually ashamed of her show of emotion, but at this point she does not care. Everything that has been weighing down on her mind for months has been let out in this moment. All her emotions, good and bad, are plain to the naked eye. She cries in a way that she has not done since her childhood. There is an odd thing about tears, we shed them only when we don’t want them. There is also an odd thing about friendship, it usually comes around when we least expect it. *

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Grade It!

[Shawn]

*Our emotions never cease to amaze us. As human beings, we are capable of great amounts of love and terrible amounts of hate. Many of us know both sorrow and joy equally well, but there are people among us who have large amounts of one and very little of the other. In many cases, our emotions control every bit of our lives. Alexandra “The White Rose” Kaesar has finally realized how much she has allowed different aspects of her emotion rule her life. Her anger has been left unchecked since her early childhood, her lust has known little bounds since adulthood, and her joy has been buried under all of this for many years. Now she has hit what is virtually rock bottom and has lost almost all will to live. She has nothing left in the world, she disowned her family some time ago, she betrayed/was betrayed by the only man she ever loved, and she has lost all of that which she believes in. Right now she is more vulnerable than she has been in years. She is nicely dressed in simple blue dress and she is standing outside the entrance to a church that she has known since her early childhood. Rose has never been what one would call a devote believer. She has always had some belief in a higher power or some sort of higher purpose, but she has had many doubts throughout her life. Particularly in her late teens when she first came to realize that she was a little different from most people her age. She didn’t to feel the way she did, but in the end, she couldn’t help it. Her prayers were never answered……………*



Faith is to believe what you do not see; the reward in faith is to see what you believe.
--Saint Augustine

*Rose stands there constantly thinking and she cannot bring herself to go into a place that she had forsaken so long ago. It slowly begins to drizzle and she is finally forced to go inside, or risk becoming drenched on this cold, dark, and horribly miserable day. She opens the door and walks right inside the church to see that it is empty and engulfed in darkness. Rose has become slightly curious by the nostalgic feeling that this room gives to her. She decides to walk down the aisle way to the front of the church despite it being pitch black this night. She walks forward slowly as she waits for her eyes to adjust to the darkness. The drizzling outside has quickly become a downpour and it sounds like the symphony of nature when it hits the roof. At about the halfway point, the room lights up and Rose knows what is about to happen. A large boom of Thunder shakes across the room and it almost startles Rose. Immediately she looks directly in front of her and hanging behind the pulpit is a painting depicting the crucifixion of Jesus Christ. Rose’s eyes open wide and her jaw drops for just a second before she closes it, but the image has already when through her mind. She did not see Jesus on the cross as we did, but instead her troubled mind saw Alicia Kitsune hanging from that cross. Suddenly guilt overwhelms Rose and she collapses to her knees and for a long time, she weeps. Again, she has let her emotions get the best of her. Everything she sees has come to remind her of her crimes and the storm outside is nothing compared to the storm within her soul. After a few seconds she begins to calm down and as the light flashes over the room, she begins to shake horribly. She whispers a nearly silent prayer and she realized that even though she is so close to home, she is more alone than ever. *

Rose: Please God, show me what I need to do. I want to make this all go away. I would do anything to get rid of this guilt. I will do whatever it takes, just let me know what I have to do.

* After a few minutes of silence, in which Rose rests on the floor, she finally gets to her feet. She silently doubts that her prayer had any effect and she turns to go out the door, but before she leaves the church, she gets her answer. The answer stands right in front of her and it is this answer that changes the course of her life. What exactly does she see? That is between her and God, if indeed it was an answer from him.*

[Shawn]

Credit: Ridley Rose



There is an old illusion-it is called good and evil
-Friedrich Nietzsche



*We find Ridley in his usual place, perched with one foot up on the ridge of the roof and leaning on the knee. The breeze is minimal, and so his cape simply ripples, rather than outright blowing, as the wind passes by.*

Ridley: Hmm....the winds are changing...

He's not just referring to the cool night breeze, and we all know it.

Ridley: It's odd, isn't it? The longer you go, and the less of a reason you see to keep going...the harder you press ahead. And here, with no feasible reason to continue in this pathetic world (that doesn't involve the reward-promising wishes of some divine power), I find myself determined to stay on this path.

As Ridley muses, a druid opens the door from the stairwell and quietly walks up next to him, staying silent and motionless as it waits.

Ridley: Perhaps for no other reason than to spit in the faces of these maggots that populate ACW...to persist, to endure, as a constant thorn in the side of their "perfect society"...yes, perhaps that's it. A monument of darkness in a field of light, to show that no matter how far the taint of idiocy and ignorance may spread over these fools...that there will always be someone who refuses to conform to their narrow, primeval concepts of "normality."

He turns; looking over the druid who's come to the roof for some unknown purpose...then decides he'll let it speak in a minute. Ridley turns his attention back to the sky.

Ridley: Until the glorious day I leave this earth behind me, that is, and ascend into the Order of the Gash...it almost brings me to tears, comparing the joys of the next life to the fools that surround me in this one. The more I look at them, the less these miserable excuses for human life deserve any form of salvation from their ignorance...but that's the problem of the Illuminatus, not myself...whoever he or she turns out to be...

*With a shake of his head, Ridley snaps out of his reverie and turns to look at the druid.*

Ridley: Make it quick.

*The Druid speaks in a low and raspy voice*

Druid: My Lord, I am sorry to disturb you, but this is of the utmost importance.

Ridley: Go on, I’m listening…..

Druid: There is a rumor moving around that Ms. Kaesar has opted to go after you instead of the other failed experiment. It appears as if Yoko has decided to stay a little longer in Okinawa, so Ms. Kaesar purportedly has extended her previous deadline. She has also challenged you to a rematch at Spring Into Hell.

*Ridley turns his back to the Druid and gazes off deeply into the darkness.*

Ridley: Ah, that’s a pity, I would have preferred for them to tear each other to shreds. Alexandra is nothing to me anymore and she shouldn’t presume that I even care enough to finish her off. She is nothing but a miserable shell of her former self now and I would prefer is she suffered in this state for the rest of her misbegotten life. Tell her that her little challenge is pathetic. I don’t wan-----

*Suddenly Ridley hears the malicious footsteps behind him and he tries to turn to face his attacker, but he cannot turn in time and soon he feels something resembling some sort of wire or rope going around throat. He is able to look out of the corner of his eyes and he sees that the very Druid that came bearing bad news is his attacker. The Druid is a great deal more skilled than the previous thugs that have attacked him. With a vice like grip, The Druid tightens the hold and Ridley slowly begins to feel his consciousness slipping. He struggles like a wild boar cornered in its den and he is much more dangerous that any beast in nature. Suddenly the Druid releases its weapon and slams Ridley headfirst into the concrete roof, causing a gash to appear right above his left eye. He goes to get to his feet, but before he can rise and fully face his opponent, The Druid opens it’s cloak and pulls out a simple carpenters hammer and bludgeons Ridley with it no more than 2 times, effectively busting the back of his head open and knocking him unconscious. The camera zooms into the Druid who quickly removes his hood to reveal that it is Alexandra “The White Rose” Kaesar. Rose stares down at her fallen former lover with nothing but rage and contempt. She walks up to him, leans in right next to his ear, and almost whispers to him*

Rose: Ah, Ridley...what can I say, really? Hopefully, when you wake up, the camera crew will give you a copy of this so you can understand what's just happened... I will undo everything that we created together. I will cleanse all the things that you have tainted, no matter what it takes. I would save you, but that is an impossibility, you’re beyond redemption and who knows, maybe I am as well. The only course of action that I can take now is to wipe you off the face of the Earth. Everything that you have built, I will destroy and God-willing, I will be redeemed in the eyes of God. Every life you have touched will have to either be cleansed of your tainted influence, or they will have to be taken care off. I will see you again, very soon and next time, I won’t be near as merciful. You’ve ruined my life and taken everything away from me, now its time that I returned the favor.

*Rose tosses of her Druid’s cloak and quickly but confidently exits the roof and Ridley is left to slowly regain consciousness.*
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Ok, I give a grading to all 3, thanks in advance

[ridley]

There was this guy who wrote like 75% of the third one, and he made it really awesome.

But I forget his name.

[Shawn]

I am so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so sorry.

Credit to Ridley on the 3rd one, he wrote a great deal of it from

Ridley: Go on, I'm listening.

That and upwords is all his and without his Godlike contribution, it would never have been possible. He is a creative genius and helped me all through it

[Shawn]

I DEMAND feedback

[scrawn]

The Revelations one is the first one I've read so far, and it's a very good promo. The quotes your have before your promos are a very nice touch, and overall I think you bring the most out of your character out of anybody in the federation.

I'm giving the Revelations promo an A