Vinnie Dulario's Criticism Thread

[vinniedulario]

Alright. Here's some things I think I need to work on.

1. Length: No, no, no, I don't mean making my segments longer, as some of you may fear. I think I get carried away and make things TOO long sometimes.

2. Description: My settings are fleshed out as well as I'd like. Also, the characters seem kind of faceless to me.

What do you all think? Do your worst, don't worry. I have a flame-proof suit!

[Fallen Souls]

well..you only did one segment...you might want to try splitting it up a bit to shorten them, otherwise, nothing wrong at all yet

[The Senator]

I'd say reduce the length of your segments in the future, few people around here are going to go through four posts to read one promo(although I will do so). It's understandable that your debut promo would be much longer, as you had quite a bit to get across, but you can say quite a bit without taking as much space. Other than that, you were fine.

[Latino]

Yea I have to go with Senator on this one. I have nothing against long promos but I don't think it's a necessity. Anyways I like your stuff and I am looking forward to see more of you as the weeks go by.