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Post by scrawn on Mar 30, 2005 8:34:38 GMT -5
Anything bad about my character? match writing? promos? put them in here
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Post by scrawn on Apr 2, 2005 9:54:35 GMT -5
bump?
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Post by BK London on Apr 2, 2005 11:43:14 GMT -5
dare·dev·il Pronunciation Key (dârdvl)
n.
-One who is recklessly bold.
You need to do something recklessly bold in my opinion. The most extreme thing you have done was face all four members of Pain Inc. Now that your LW champion you will have to step up your game. Do something crazy that people will remember.
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Post by Latino on Apr 2, 2005 11:59:50 GMT -5
Well I kind of agree with Bk. You should really step up your game. Especially now that you are LW champ you have so many possibities to really grab some attention here. Let loose and just be as creative as you can be. Make not only your character known but that gold around your waist.
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Post by scrawn on Apr 4, 2005 17:32:26 GMT -5
Note taken. Now, anything about my promos?
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Post by The Senator on Apr 4, 2005 17:35:11 GMT -5
Come up with some catchphrase that would easily get attention. You do best with both humerous promos, and really intense ones, such as when you busted up Ginger's office. Work on the midrange ones, and try to come up with some memerable stuff for the mid range ones.
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Post by scrawn on Apr 4, 2005 17:38:47 GMT -5
Do you know that I've been trying to think of a ctachphrase for ages, but I just can't think of one
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Post by The Senator on Apr 4, 2005 19:16:08 GMT -5
Let it flow naturally from your promos, that's how I got the whole "nothing but the truth" phrase. You'll find one eventually if you look hard enough.
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Post by scrawn on May 21, 2005 4:53:20 GMT -5
It's been a month and a half since I started my criticism thing, so I would just like a sort of update to see how I'm doing since all the criticism
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Post by Latino on May 21, 2005 13:32:15 GMT -5
Well I like what you are doing and have been doing as champ. Right now I can't think of anything else. I'm sure others can though.
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Post by scrawn on Jun 30, 2005 9:28:53 GMT -5
Uppity up. I need more critcism
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Post by BK London on Jun 30, 2005 11:33:10 GMT -5
Now that this feud with AJK is over, feud with someone for the LW Title. I cannot remember a time you defended your title at a PPV...
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Post by scrawn on Jul 30, 2005 14:22:19 GMT -5
Ok here's a roleplay I wrote about my match with Jonny Spade for Warfare. It's not going into the show or anything, just I used that match as an idea on what to write my rp on. I've not made a proper roleplay like this for ages and would like to know what people think of it.
Of course anyone that I made fun of in this roleplay it doesn't mean it's how I feel about them irl.
.-The Number One Contender-.
Dan ‘the Daredevil’ White is found in the ACW bar, where he is seen resting, his right arm half-on the bar desk and the other arm holding a bottle of an unknown German Lager. He is casually breathing, with his usual attire on, plus an open blue shirt with lime green pinstripes. He lazily drifts around, looking at the other people that happen to be in the area. There is a couple sitting on a desk nearby, chatting about a subject but it is unclear to the camera what they are saying. Daredevil takes a swig of his lager, swinging around and looking at the typical spirits hanging up on the rack behind the barman.
Dan: You know when you’ve been there, and done it wherever life seeks you, you can only afford to sit back here and watch as the rest of the world hopelessly deals with its problems. I can just rest here in the bar, like I have done for the past two weeks or so and just smile at what is happening in other parts of the ACW. You have Mercer Stanton and Gingerdude fighting, which is quite funny actually. You also have worthless jokes such as Predator or Jake Cheng trying to gain the Entertainment strap, the belt that I famously held in the best. Well boys, you want advice I’m standing right here. And finally, you have three losers chasing the belt that was mine. BK London, Jade and TNT fighting for the Lightweight belt? Good luck to whoever wins it to make a reign as half, nay a quarter as long as my illustrious and UNDEFEATED streak.
He takes another drink of his lager, before placing it on the bar desk in front of him. He pulls out a packet of cigarettes, a British brand and thus unheard of in America, and lights it up.
Dan: Yes, the Lightweight title I made my own. With the exception of a certain Asian girl I wish not to speak the name of, my title reign has been the longest, and unlike that Asian girl the best reign in ACW history. But it’s just so damn typical of the ACW not to give that certain Asian girl a worthy competitor to face, just so she ends up with a longer reign than me. It’s just so typical of ACW to hold me off and be thrown everyone and everything at me, yet for me to still beat everyone that’s come across my path. Worthless beings such as the likes of Jake Cheng, Canadian Dragon, Blade Shadow or Davey Marvel, I’ve defeated them all. So through a complete fluke, I somehow lose the belt because of something I said, which is just not justice. But now that belt means nothing to me. Because I have found out that Dan ‘the Daredevil’ White has the perfect passage to finally enjoy a little bit of glory, and a little bit of respect around here. I have got a shot at the International title.
He takes a deep drag of the cigarette, controlling his inhalation. He proceeds to slowly exhale the smoke away from the barman, and taps the end of the cigarette, causing the burnt ash to float into the ash tray.
Dan: So the big guys up in the office finally decided that I get some of the glory. To be honest it’s about time. I’ve been here for what? Ten months? And I have little to show but two worthless chunks of metal and leather that I made prestigious. So there’s one man…ONE MAN that stands in my way of getting a title shot at Angelo Giovanni. And his name is Jonny Spade. This man who I admit I have some respect for if you consider previous battles we’ve had. But the bottom line here Jonny boy is that I have had the previous success, and when I enter the ring with you tonight, it’s just going to be another 1…2…3 for the Welsh Dragon Double-D. And you better believe, that when I go out there, Live and Let Die blasting on the PA system, it ain’t gonna be pretty. But the bottom line remains that I’ve had the better success, I’m still the best damn midcarder in the ACW, I deserve to be up there with the likes of Yoko and Senator but thanks to a fluke I’m not.
He finishes his cigarette, stubbing it out on the ashtray. He considers taking another cigarette, but instead opts for another lager. He looks at the open bottle, admiring the condensation on the side of the bottle, before lifting it up with his left hand and sealing the top off with his lips. He proceeds to fall back with the bottle secured upon his mouth and slowly downs the drink in one, without using his hands. He smiles as he finishes off and places the bottle on the desk, again admiring the bottle.
Dan: Party trick, never fails. And I tell you who never fails; you’re looking at the man right now. And I know you’re thinking ‘gee Daredevil, you’ve lost a lot of matches in the past’, well wrestling with injuries comes at a cost my friend. I’ve had many, many injuries that have come as a result of wrestling, but that’s my desire. And Jonny Spade if you’re watching this right now you’ll obviously be able to tell me about the match we once had at Bloody Valentine. Doomsday Cage match? The most sickening ankle break you will ever be able to have the pleasure of viewing? It was all there. Jonny Spade, I can guarantee that tonight, we will blow the house off of the ACW Arena tonight. But there can only be one winner, and his name, is ‘the Welsh Dragon’, Dan ‘the Daredevil’ White. And that, my friend, is the right touch…
Dan smirks at the camera as he lights a cigarette. He smokes the stick casually as he tells the barman to get him another beer. The barman proceeds in opening up his third bottle of the night, as the cameraman hits a switch, resulting in the screen slowly fading to the black…
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Post by scrawn on Aug 6, 2005 12:53:26 GMT -5
Nice to see everybody lovede it so...or not?
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Post by scrawn on Aug 13, 2005 17:50:42 GMT -5
Ok feedback would be welcome with a chocolate raisin >_>
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