ACW Overtime: Pre-Show [FEEDBACK]

[Thunderkiss]

Thunderkiss' Feedback:

Dan White said:

Bravo

Jason Freeman said:

Stop man, now I want ACW back. I NEVER GOT MY ACW CHAMPIONSHIP REMATCH.

Torak said:

Belated feedback as this place has gone quiet lately.

I can't say I know too much about the TK character but this segment may have summed him up perfectly and certainly gave me a good idea of what to expect. (No-nonsense, take no crap from anybody and willing to do anything to survive.)

I particularly liked the introduction setting the scene up. It really put me in the dark and dangerous setting. I wouldn't like to be Edison right now.

Hopefully get to read more segments from you and others in the lead up to the Reunion.

Mark said:

Fuck. How did I not see this until now? This is awesome stuff. I could practically feel the disgust from TK's dialogue.

Does this mean we can post promos like this? Or should we just save them for the show? I only ask in case I feel I should shake off any rust that's built up over the last three years, haha.

Torak's Feedback:

Thunderkiss said:

Thanks for getting the ball rolling, Torak. This is my type of writing.

XS3's Feedback:

Torak said:

Good segment. I really felt the sense that he'd moved on from ACW and continued his life and not just drifted into limbo. I'm looking forward to seeing how the relationship between XS3 and TK pans out during the show.

Thunder Train's Feedback:

Jason Freeman said:

I love you Thunder Train

[Torak]

One for the Road: Thunder Train

I loved this segment. Train obviously still doesn't take crap from anyone and while easily provoked, he won't be easily beaten. I've got to say, I'm looking forward to seeing his match at the show.

bon chic/ bon genre: Echo

I can't say I really know much about Echo, but what an interesting and intriguing character. A very well written segment with some sharp dialogue. I very much would have liked to have seen my Cordelia LaBlanc up against Ayres LeBlanc, in and out of the ring.

Keep 'em coming people!

Also, feedback for my segment(s) would be much appreciated ;-)

[Thunderkiss]

Torak: Trailer reminded me of film noir, my favorite type of genre. I loved the tease and you seem to imply a certain someone is still alive and may be coming back. I could be off because I am not that familiar with your character, but I am hooked. Continue.

Mark: You are the ultimate face. XS3 just comes across as such a good guy, you play that part so well. I loved catching up with the guy and I loved the backdrop and you mentioning myself, AC Evens and all those who have invaded your personal space. I loved my mention, something tells me that even though we are not booked together, our paths will most likely cross once more.

Train: Loved this. You have improved a lot. The old fashioned dinner setting - loved it. I loved how different Train was at first. No joking, kinda low-key and then comes everyone's favorite lawyer, Thunder Lawyer (I loved how we just put Thunder in front of everything) to bring him back. Top Gun reference, FTW. Same as Mark, I am sure our paths will cross at the show. I also marked at your infamous line. This sstuff was and always has been gold.

Echo/Ridley. This is the highest compliment I can give anyone, you write like AK. Your writing is incredibly descriptive, I can picture just what type of girl Echo is just off the first few lines. Her interaction with Edison was the best I've read yet. Can't wait for more.

Torak again: "Solid Snake" your way into a place like this - lol. You did a great job with the setting, I saw a place much like the old gyms in the Rocky movies. Grimy but amazing if the walls could talk. I learned quite a bit Cyda and the rest of the gang. Another fantastic job with Edison!

Mainer: It was good to see Caitlynn again. You know, I forgot about little miss Caitlynn. She was always such a nice girl. Such a nice, sweet girl. *licks lips*

CP: You're the first to tie into the last show and I loved it. It was like a sequel to "Goodbye Game." I take it CP has gone home to become a family man. Can't wait to see what you and Macho can do.

[Torak]

Mainer: The Passion of the Wrestler

I loved...loved....LOVED this segment and how it alluded to the conversion of Mainer. Every single character that has set foot in ACW has since moved on in different ways, but I reckon this is going to be the most original transformation. Oh to be a fly on the wall when Edison meets the Mainerishi

CP: A New Chapter
I never really got to witness or appreciate CP's contribution to ACW back then, but just from this segment alone I can see what all the fuss was about. Superbly written and paced. CP just seems to ooze the personality of a champion. CP vs RDK is going to be a five star match.

[Torak]

TK & Mainer: 100%

The more I read of Mainer, the more I love the character. He really does seem the self-righteous type that would really get under your skin. I can truly imagine how difficult it would have been for TK to resist blowing his brains out, particularly with their history which is also being well coloured in with each segment.
TK's internal struggle with his impulses is great to read and he's becoming more and more like his old self.

Despite the contrasting styles and personalities of the characters involved, this match is going to be brutal.

[Torak]

Echo: Incipit satanas

I don't know why, but I got the air of "Girl with the Dragon Tattoo" when I read this. I think the writing style is very similar to Stieg Larson. I'm very much in love with this character and I feel that there's a backstory that I haven't even brushed upon yet. Hopefully more to come.

[Jason Freeman]

Im going to go through them again even the ones I commented on.

TK: Im excited to see what will happen to make Thunderkiss change his mind, and do the show after all. Given TK's penchant for over-the-top storylines it should be fun to see that unfold. I hope it's tied into the match with Mainer because Im interested in what the two will come up with, though no doubt Ill regret saying that lol. Anyways, this segment shows that Thunderkiss hasn't changed a bit since leaving ACW, and of course that'd be his line of work. As Torak said, this segment would definitely let anybody reading it know who Thunderkiss is, even if they didn't already know. Although as far as TK goes, I guess this was one of his more grounded ones. Thunderkiss's writing always impressed me, even though I've never really been as into the over-the-top segments. But he's always good enough to make them work regardless, which is why he deserved to be in the hall of fame. Thunderkiss also may have my favorite text color of all time, and I was happy to see it back!

Torak: With most people doing standard segments, it was interesting to see this trailer-based one instead. I don't know much at all about Torak, though I've heard about him a lot. I can't remember if I ever saw him write. So I don't know (or maybe don't remember if I ever did know) the backstory of the Torak character. What I liked most about this segment was the end, I really liked the effect of rapid images caused by a sentence with just commas to separate the disjoint scenes. Very cool segment. Torak and TK should do a segment together on the show.

XS3: I really liked the beginning of this. The way you mentioned the people who had gone to the house before to disturb the surroundings. That sense of history was really cool, and the juxtaposition of that crazy past with the current peace of XS3's life. I don't remember AC Evans or TK going there (or who Hatchet is), so to see that put in there though, gave some nice sense of history to the segment. Actually the whole segment had a nice sense of history, including thinking back to the history with Thunderkiss. I actually thought this was really good, and Im gonna echo what some people said before. It's like TK said. XS3 is a great face since he always just seems like such a nice guy. And like Torak said, I like that it felt very real how XS3 had moved on. I like how you tied it into the earlier Thunderkiss segment as well, making the stories feel connected.

Train: Out of all the guys who would make crazy over-the-top segments, Train was always my favorite, because he was always so funny and matter-of-fact in how he did it. It was great to see him writing again, and like everyone, I marked out for his ending line.

Echo: Great dialogue in this segment. I feel like Echo was around when I was...I seem to remember some story with AK....for some reason I can't remember anything about it though. Sorry about that, it's been a while. I seem to remember Echo being the same writer as Ridley being a big surprise or something. Wish I could remember more. Anyways, regardless, I liked the quirky dialogue and the awkwardness of Edison. It should be fun to see how the oath of non-violence works into Echo's match.

Torak #2: Im usually more of a dialogue guy than a long description guy, but wow, you're great at making the descriptions not dry at all, and actually really interesting. Cordelia...that name sounds familiar...was that character around in my time? I don't know who Cyda White is either...hm...looking back through the search function it seems they were both around in 2009. Anyways, whether I remember or not it didn't matter, since this segment gave such a good idea of who Cyda White is. I actually think this was the best segment I've read so far, I think it was amazing. Great job, I loved it.

Mainer: HEY I RETIRED YOU MAINER! GET OUT OF HERE! I like how Caitlyn sort of lampshaded the ridiculousness of his changes. I have no idea how the Mainerishi thing is going to play out, but it seems interesting so far. I like how jaded Caitlyn has become to the business, and I like how we had this segment to hype up the Mainerishi before we actually see him ourselves.

CP: Lol! I loved the Trace Birmingham cameo. I also liked that you decided to do a segment not now, but in the moments immediately following the last ACW show. You're the first person to actually go and flashback to the last show. Like TK, with Phenomenal having everything he wants, and no real reason to return, I look forward to seeing how the inevitable meeting with Edison goes, and whether CP will be willing to come back or need some convincing since he has his family, which as he said here, is all he needs.

TK/Mainer: Somehow I feel like this is the craziest Mainer's ever been, which is saying something. I have no idea where this feud is going, but it's probably going to be insane. I look forward to both Mainer and TK returning to their roots which is inevitable.

Torak #3 and Torak #4: Again, Torak's segments impressed me a lot. I feel like you always get a sense of who the characters are, even if like me, you don't remember or weren't around for them. My only thing is, do WWE and TNA exist in the ACW universe? I always assumed they didn't, but I dunno if there's an actual consensus on it. I liked the second segment, with the wondering about whose predicament was worse, Chris with his financial security but physical pain, or Cyda with his lack of money. You sure have a lot of characters, but all of them seem fleshed out which is great.

Echo #2: Another great segment, that made me really wanna go back and see what you had written as the Echo character in the past, since I know I was around for it, or at least I think so, and this made me really want to revisit it. That ending made Echo's presence at the reunion show even more exciting.

I enjoyed all of these a lot guys, it really feels like nobody missed a step, and I love how everybody showed where there character is now, and I also like that it seems like there's a lot that's going to explode at the show itself. This is really exciting!

[Mark]

TK, I *REALLY* fucking enjoyed the Act 2 promo. Just to know that TK is getting more and more detached from reality, and having the Chef (woot woot) aggravate it even further is awesome to see. And XD at the FHRITG guy in the news pic.

I really enjoyed Echo's second promo too, the awkward tension made for a good read.

[Torak]

Time to pick up on more feedback for you crazy mofos. It's time to pull up a directors chair, put on a suit and tie and get all Roger Ebert on your asses.

Thunderkiss: 200%
First of all, am I correct in assuming TK lives in the GTA Universe? That is an awesome idea!
Secondly, the idea that TK had repressed all of his rage and brutality to the point where it is now bubbling at the surface and ready to, as we saw, explode.
I'm not sure which way the ending was supposed to be interpreted, but I saw it as a mixture of that repressed energy exploding from TK plus also Mainer being inside TK's head, coaxing out the TK of old.

Mark: The Gods Weep
I like the way that Hitman has moved on contrasts others in that it's not so bitter, more crest-fallen than the rest of the ACW alumni. He didn't take much persuasion, which to me signifies Hitman's desire to properly close that chapter of his life before he can properly move on. I've always liked Hitman's stuff and so am looking forward to what he gets up to at the show.


As for my contribution, The Reunion continues tonight and concludes tomorrow, so stay tuned folks!
(I'd also really appreciate any feedback from you guys if you get the chance)

[Thunderkiss]

Jan 11, 2015 7:03:13 GMT -5 Torak said:

Thunderkiss: 200%
First of all, am I correct in assuming TK lives in the GTA Universe? That is an awesome idea!

I like to put Easter Eggs in my promos, always did. A bunch of us used to play XBOX Live together for like two years, and GTA4 was our game of choice. That is why I constantly use references from the game.

Glad you enjoyed it, I have been busy using my ACW Time to actually write I am behind on the last 5 promos but don't worry, I'll read 'em.

[Torak]

CP: A new Baptism

I'm never usually a fan of dialogue only promos but I did enjoy the exchange between CP and TJ. Their relationship was well painted and I particularly like the faux-pas comments that CP makes. I think we're always trying to build our characters as flawless and never really sell them as real humans who aren't perfect. With this, CP seems real and believable.

[VorteX]

Good stuff from all. It's almost like the place never closed. Look forward to reading the upcoming show(s).