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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Jan 20, 2010 17:32:16 GMT -5
M Y S T E R Y [/center][/color] credit: Rena & ? The night had quieted down. ACW's show in Seattle had ended and we find Rena dressed in jeans and a black military jacket- not exactly fit for the weather. She was smart, though, she packed gloves in her suitcase. As she walked down and empty street, she looked up at the streetlights towering above her, blowing out strongly to see her breath in the air. She stopped and grabbed a handful of snow from the ground and crunched it in her hand. Oh God, how she missed New York. Turning the snow into a ball in her hand, she threw it lightly into a streetlight to her right. Laughing to herself wondering why she just did that, she continued to walk.
Nothing could be heard besides her heels clicking on the pavement. Narrowing her eyes to see into the distance, Rena spotted her target and hurried over to the bench, sitting down. Beside her was a man, but she didn't look at him. She decided to look forward as he sat beside her with his head down.
She waited. Waited for something to happen. She wondered if she was supposed to say something first, just she decided to stay silent for a while. Looking at the thin layer of snow around her, she began to read the etchings people had made into the wooden bench before her concentration was broken....: What do you have for me? RENA:Nothing. Absolutely nothing. ...: What do you mean by 'nothing'? Rena sighed and leaned her head in her hands before shaking her head.RENA:I don't know anything. ...: Miss Matheson, you joined TK's cause. Surely you know something. RENA:I wish I did. It's just, he doesn't tell me shit. ...: Language, please. RENA:Sorry. He doesn't tell me anything. He makes everything a surprise. I don't know if anything's happening until just before it happens. ...: I see. RENA:And most times I don't know why things are done. The man beside her cleared his throat....: Have you tried to ask him why? RENA:Yes, but he just says "Rena, sister! You'll understand in time". Rena sighed again. RENA:I might have more in the future, but as of right now I have absolutely nothing. ...: Well, let's hope. RENA:So what do you want with TK and SLA? ...: Miss Matheson, I am a businessman. I'm interested in competition. It is the lifeblood of any business such as this. RENA:Do you want to destroy them? ...: No. No, I merely wish to observe. See what they're planning, so I can plan accordingly. Rena raised an eyebrow and looked straight at the man.RENA:You're telling me the great Hawthorne doesn't want to completely obliterate SLA? HAWTHORNE: Miss Matheson, I am simply interested to see how SLA will fare against ACW. Which will prosper, and which will falter. A little competition is always good for business; it gives the customers something to latch on to, something to invest a little bit of belief into. It might also kick start some of those in the company to work harder for their paychecks when they know there is someone nipping at their heels. As of right now, I'm not concerned. I am just interested in how Mr. Joseph thinks. That's why I contacted you. You and he are close, and I understand that you have particular skills in dealing with men of influence. I figured you'd have more information. RENA:Yeah, well I don't. HAWTHORNE: I wonder if his wife has any information. You're close with her as well, correct? RENA:Anna? Yes, I can try. I can't make promises. HAWTHORNE: Well, once you find something out just let me know. You know how to reach me. I must be going now, though. I apologize for my sudden leave. RENA:It's fine. I'm freezing my balls off out here anyways. Hawthorne sighed.HAWTHORNE: Is it so impossible for you to talk to your boss with respect and class? RENA:I'm sorry, it just happens. HAWTHORNE: At any rate, you don't have testicles. RENA:It's a figure of speech. HAWTHORNE: Right. Well, I must be leaving. Until next time, Miss Matheson. RENA:Bye. Hawthorne began down the street before hopping into a black limo, driving slowly off into the distance. Rena had begun to walk the opposite way, dialing Anna on her BlackBerryRENA:Anna? Hey, babe! Do you want to do drink next week? Just us girls. Okay! Sounds good. My place? Okay, Tuesday night it is. Love you babe! Rena hung up the phone and continued to walk down the street towards her hotel room, running the conversation she just had through her head. So, what exactly is Samuel Hawthorne up to? Does he simply want to profit from ACW’s name? Or is there more to his apparent scheming?
With a Supercard coming, you can bet there will be some more surprises...
Fade to Black.
End of Show.
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Rena
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Post by Rena on Jan 20, 2010 18:24:51 GMT -5
good show kids. 4 pages? EEEEEEEEEEEE we're picking up steam!
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Post by worldbreaker on Jan 20, 2010 19:00:22 GMT -5
The way some of these promos are interwinding together is impressing me.
that is all.
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Jason Freeman
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Post by Jason Freeman on Jan 20, 2010 19:19:59 GMT -5
Wow! Fourth page? Here I am thinking it sucks that I couldnt get promos in for this show and it looks like it didnt make much of a difference!
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criminal
New Breed
Ohh that was ur girl... I thought i reconized her!!
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Post by criminal on Jan 20, 2010 21:00:42 GMT -5
The shows are picking up pace. I see that as becoming a bright future for ACW
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Jason Freeman
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Post by Jason Freeman on Jan 20, 2010 21:03:55 GMT -5
And it's all because of you, Criminal. >_>
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criminal
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Ohh that was ur girl... I thought i reconized her!!
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Post by criminal on Jan 20, 2010 21:10:42 GMT -5
hahahahahaha.... we got a jokester...
not a very good one at that....lol
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TJ
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I LOVE DAN WHITE
Good, you're working out Freeman....you're gonna need to
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Post by TJ on Jan 20, 2010 21:38:11 GMT -5
*See Freeman without feedback*
GET TO WORK SLAVE!
EDIT: Actually, wait till a few things get added. There was a segment and extra match that needs to be added due to my english project going ALOT longer than expected
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Post by Trent Wheeler on Jan 20, 2010 21:53:09 GMT -5
Wow. Amazing turn-out. The supercard's name is true to ACW now.
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criminal
New Breed
Ohh that was ur girl... I thought i reconized her!!
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Post by criminal on Jan 20, 2010 22:39:47 GMT -5
i seem to have a good feeling about the supercard... i bet it makes it to the 5 page mark.
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Post by Kim Jong CP on Jan 20, 2010 22:52:56 GMT -5
Disclaimer:The following views expressed are of course my opinion. My opinion is neither right or wrong its just what I think. If I speak negatively of you in anyway, please do not feel that I don’t like you, what you wrote or that your promos are awful. In fact if I any of the above were true I wouldn’t bother with them and I speak negatively in the hopes that what I say can possibly aid you, I really don’t want people to get discouraged over things like these. Also, please realize that with the amount of talented writers that we have it’s a super tough job picking out just five promos, there are a number of people I‘d like to help, or would like to give commendation for and not everyone can make every list. Also, I do not pick my own segments. As much as marking for one’s self can do wonders for one’s self esteem, there is not a place for it here.So I’m taking a page out of Thunderkiss’ book kind of, I don’t necessarily have the time I’d like to leave notes on everyone’s promo’s so rather than do just that, I’ll pick five and hopefully go a bit more indepth. As always though if I don’t pick yours and you want some specific feedback, insight, or help, send me a PM. Anyways, I think this show was straight fuckin’ brilliant, out return to four pages in length is actually quite special and shows remarkable improvement over where we were just over a month ago. I think it speaks to the effort put in by each and every one of you and so to start, I’d like to commend you on work well done. Secondly, I’d like to commend everyone on being a part of the shows with a feud, something that was lacking near the latter end of last year, looking at what I have for the card up and too this point I think every active person on the roster has a match booked for the show and I look forward to that. Phenomenal’s Five- Round Two--VorteX
I don’t mind this segment, it serves it’s purpose really, VorteX has a match tonight and does a good job adding a bit to it, bringing up their past encounter. That said however there’s something that’s never sat right with me in regards to VorteX and that’s that he doesn’t really seem to have a face/heel status. Before I saw him as a face, not necessarily a defined one but it was their, now however I don’t know, his catch phrase is kind of face, his interviews seem very much like a face, but his actions SCREAM heel. It’s kind of weird as well because I think VorteX, with the sci-fi thing could be kind of that intimidating heel based on his actions but isn’t their. He’s an accomplished writer and is in a good feud, I just don’t really know. I think it in part too has to go with his opening feud here in ACW that didn’t necessarily give him the greatest start.
- Still Going--Dave and TJ
I like this, setting up after their alignment though did find Williams removal kind of strange especially coming in so soon. That said I like what’s presented my only fear is that it’s going to the same well as Dave and I did which was ultra-effective but has now been done as of late. Taking that off, while the dialogue seemed a bit forced that’s to be expected and will improve once the two get used to working together a bit more. I think Dave aligning himself with TJ is good but my only problem is TJ’s trying to make himself “bigger.” Yes he was a big deal in ECF, but here not necessarily and he could be setting himself up into a trap wherein a misplaced loss will really hurt him. He’s a big guy and if he came in as the muscle for Dave with history with some people but left it in the dark that maybe would have been better and also giving himself something to work on in the future.
- At The Hospital--The Red Panther
I’m actually really liking this feud, Panther poses actually as a really good foil for Flamingo’s psychotic nature, someone who is strong and has a bit of an ego as shown by the promo but allows Flamingo to go over the top being out of control. Mickey Flamingo is also my favorite manager character by far, his speech pattern is nice as well, especially when most people end up with the proper English. I also hope this feud serves as a spring board for Panther into the top card scene as I see that as the logical progression for him, having narrowly missed on the Entertainment Title at Winters Discontent.
- Court Massacre--Criminal
I don’t know, I actually like the criminal character but he’s not what I first envisioned. I imagined some petty thug who thought he was the absolute shit type thing. Now though I just don’t get it. It doesn’t make sense, I’m all for going above and the realm of possibility, I love that stuff just ask Mainer, TK or anyone from PWF where I’m doing that thing. What I don’t like however is when they try and set it in reality but go beyond it. I get trying to be a bad-ass, but seducing and murdering a prostitute (Billy Kidman) is Murder-1, life and definitely not out in ten years. Tack on drugs and stuff that he’s been convicted for, even if he was 50 and got out after 25 years due to a plea, good behavior on the murder he’d be back in and done. I get the idea but the execution is off…by a long mile. If you need help, I’d be glad to do so though as I think this character could fit in well and has many a foil here in ACW.
- King Nothing--Danny, Ken and Cody
Oh it’s AWN! I’m really, really glad to see this SLA storyline picking up and I’d like to see other people getting involved in it as well. I think between the SLA International Title and this match it’s a good start to this movement and with the way things are looking for ACW, could eventually lead to the brand split some were pining for. Onto this segment it does a really good job of setting up the battle between these two and adding another chapter to their storied history. I also like Mainer being Mr. ACW and standing up to them and then team SLA taking him down. It gives some credibility to the SLA stable, puts them over more so as heels or faces within the KISS ARMY, but also supplants Mainer IMO as the second face behind Shadow. I envision good things here. Moment of the showSenator has some awesome stuff going down, between the random mid-match segments and now Thiago coming out of nowhere, it’s good fun and honestly, I can think of a few awesome things to do with Thiago.
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Jason Freeman
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Post by Jason Freeman on Jan 20, 2010 22:59:20 GMT -5
CP only has time for five of you. Luckily there's me and Jack Jefferson. WE HAVE TIME FOR ALL
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criminal
New Breed
Ohh that was ur girl... I thought i reconized her!!
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Post by criminal on Jan 20, 2010 23:18:34 GMT -5
the reason why i got out early will be stated next week
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redbadger
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I don't look anything like this!
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Post by redbadger on Jan 20, 2010 23:27:45 GMT -5
I'm starting to get the feel for these shows. The segments were all great, the reserved spots threw me off while I was reading through but other than that, a very solid lead up to the Supershow! I too was shocked by the 4 pages ! Great job guys, can't wait to read through Born Again!
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Post by Kim Jong CP on Jan 20, 2010 23:32:03 GMT -5
CP only has time for five of you. Luckily there's me and Jack Jefferson. WE HAVE TIME FOR ALL Freeman takes until Sunday to do it, CP doesn't.
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