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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:44:50 GMT -5
“Fast” Eddie Edison: Near fall there Max! I can’t believe Vortex kicked out of that one after his own move backfired on him! We’re about 10 minutes into this match though, and time is working against these men if they want to have a winner!
Spade gets to his feet and is immediately hit with a running knee from Jefferson, sending him back down to the mat. Jefferson knows that time is fading and he quickly brings Spade to his feet, and sends him into the turnbuckle, looking to end the match. As Jefferson gets Spade up to the top rope with some effort, he looks to hit his finisher.
Maxwell McNally: No way Jose! Do you see the size difference there? Even if Jefferson could pull this off, he’s far too tired to attempt that now! He should have gone with one of his other finishers…
As Jefferson is getting Spade into position, Vortex gets himself to his feet once more and rushes the men. The crowd rise in noise as Vortex nears the men, and Vortex uses Jefferson as a ladder to get to Spade. The crowd explodes with noise as Vortex knocks Spade out of Jefferson’s grip and hits him with a spinning tornado DDT from the top rope.
“Fast” Eddie Edison: Oh my! Top rope Whirlwind of Destruction! If THAT doesn’t entertain you, I don’t know what will! Somehow Vortex found enough equilibrium to steal the show from Jefferson, however that had to take a lot out of him!
As Vortex is getting up, Jefferson decides he wants to go high risk. Vortex looks up to see Jefferson coming down off the top with a moonsault, which takes Vortex off his feet. All three men are down on the mat and RAF starts his ten count. The match is nearing it’s time limit, and all three men are clearly losing steam. Jefferson is the first to rise as Spade is still recovering from
Vortex’s assault, and Vortex is busy trying to figure out which way is up. Jefferson senses this and picks Vortex up off the mat, knowing that he is still groggy from missing the high risk move from before. Spade hits a quick Samoan Drop on Vortex and then flips him to his stomach and locks in a Border City Stretch. RAF drops to one knee, and Vortex yells out in pain, trying not to submit. The move is taking its toll on his upper back however, and Vortex is locked to the middle of the ring.
Maxwell McNally: I think this could end right here! Jefferson is wisely targeting Vortex’s weak spot by locking in that crossface. Both the neck and upper back of Vortex have got to be killing him after taking so many high risk shots!
Vortex struggles and raises his arm as if he wants to tap out, however he shakes his head ‘no’ when RAF asks if he wishes to give in. Jefferson continues to scream obscenities at Vortex and the now booing fans, and Vortex raises his arm again. Before he can bring it down Spade kicks Jefferson in the head. “Fast” Eddie Edison: Spades back! The question is, will he go after Jefferson…or Vortex?
Spade chooses to go after Jefferson, and picks him up off the mat. After giving Jefferson a stunning chest chop, he whips him into the ropes and as Jefferson rebounds Spade lifts him up and hits him with his Jonormus Slam, being a bit too tired to hit the full Silver Spade. The crowd roars and Jonny pins.
1….2….
Vortex breaks up the pin with a weary double axehandle just in time. Spade looks infuriated and rises to his feet. As he rises he is hit with a combo from Vortex, first a roundhouse, then a spinning heel kick, and finally a stunning axe kick that plants him to the mat. Vortex wastes little time and pins.
1…2…..kickout!
Spade somehow manages to throw Vortex off him and Vortex rolls to the ropes. Jefferson is busy recovering in one corner, while Spade remains on his back looking up at the lights, and Vortex is holding is head and supporting himself with the ropes. The crowd is going nuts and all of the men are wondering if they can possibly put one another away before the clock runs down.
Maxwell McNally: Imagine if we didn’t have a time limit Eddie! These men are taking each other to the limit, however I just know they could go so much farther if they weren’t trying to race the clock.
“Fast” Eddie Edison: You might be right Max. It looks like the men are done resting though, and I fear we are either going to see a winner soon or have a very upset crowd as time expires...
The ticking clock is threatening to end the match; but, much to the fans’ approval, Jefferson refuses to be beaten by time, and he goes for the most obvious target. Spade is about halfway to his feet when Jefferson rockets forward, on willpower as much as energy, and launches himself into him; the two men tumble and Jefferson manages to twist Spade around into an improvised roll-up. Still groggy from Vortex’s axe kick, Jonny can’t tell which way is up, and the ref is in the perfect position to count. Vortex makes a game attempt to break the pin up, but is just a fraction too late, and the 3 count is given, triggering the bell.
Phillip: Here is your winner, Jack Jefferson!
Jefferson jumps up, clearly delighted with his win, and he gets up on the turnbuckle, lording it over the fans.
Vortex curses his near-miss; as he does so, he spots a figure leaning against the ringside barriers. He’s more than a little surprised to find that it’s the Criminal himself; evidently he’s been there the entire match, watching as he said he would.
Their eyes meet, and Criminal gives nothing away. He simply shakes his head a little, and then melts away into the throng of fans. Vortex frowns; he has a feeling this is far from over...
Fade to the Break.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:45:22 GMT -5
Segment: What do you want from me? (Credit: Run Away/TK)
To the back we go! The first person we get a glimpse of is Thunderkiss himself, feeling a little peeved after the situation with Run Away a few moments ago. He retains his swagger as he heads over to his locker room. After entering his Deathstar so to say, Thunderkiss looks around and sighs, a mix of frustration and content.
Thunderkiss: Twenty-five bucks! I still can't believe the audacity of that crackerjack! He ought to be thankful he even got paid!
Thunderkiss takes a step forward then stops. Something feels out of place. But what it is remains to be seen.
Thunderkiss: What's this?!
Thunderkiss definitely hears a sound. Footsteps sound appropriate to him. It doesn't take long for him to piece together who is in his locker room.
Thunderkiss: Friend or foe? If it's the later, prepared to have a locker chucked at your head!
As Thunderkiss steps forward a bit more, he stops once again. Dust from the ceiling tiles fall in front of him. Before he can even realize what will happen next, a part of the ceiling caves in and Run Away is seen in a black outfit, complete with a balaclava with a hole on top to get his ponytail out. Run Away crashes directly onto Thunderkiss and creates a loud thud noise. Run Away soon gets up and rubs the side of his head.
Run Away: Oh dear... I seem to have mistimed my calculations! Hmm, let's see...
Run Away reaches into his back pocket and pulls out a piece of paper. He unfolds it and looks at it from different angles. Run Away soon facepalms.
Run Away: D'oh! I knew I forgot to carry the three. This has proved to be quite the costly error.
As Run Away tugs at his beard in disappointment, he is unaware of the impending danger. Thunderkiss slowly rises behind Run Away and he does not look pleased.
Thunderkiss: Don't say I didn't warn you! I'm going to CRUSH YOU!
Run Away: Zounds! My mission will have to wait for now!
Run Away soon spins around and budges past Thunderkiss, dodging a flying lamp. As he runs off, a faint Curly whooping noise can be heard from Run Away's mouth. Thunderkiss looks on in seething rage and calls out to his escaping rival.
Thunderkiss: You son of a bitch! You ever pull a stunt like that again and twenty five dollars is going to be the least of your worries!
Fade.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:45:50 GMT -5
Match 5: Second Main Event Chris Phenomenal vs. Yoko Satoshi (Credit: Chris P) One main event down, one more to go. For the first time since Omega Effect Yoko Satoshi will make her presence known in an ACW ring without the aid of her former lover, and tag team partner Sarin Rossi. Her opponent, Chris Phenomenal, the young newcomer to the roster who was not around during her reign of terror, a pay per view worthy main event on live TV. As the shot cuts ringside, coming in from our final commercial, the atmosphere is incredibly tense, as is with every single night Yoko steps into the ring in the singles match. Murmurs abound of “will this be the night”, “can he do it”, “is the one.” For nearly five years Yoko Satoshi has gone unbeaten in singles competition and inside the ring Phillip Jones is ready to bring to us the man who hopes to finally be the one to end that streak. Jones: Ladies and gentleman, the following contest is scheduled for one fall. Introducing first, from Harlem New York! Weighing in at two hundred and sixty three pounds, standing six feet, seven inches tall. A slow piano beat begins to play as the voice of Senator fills the ACW Arena. Jones: Being accompanied to the ring by Senator Steve Phillips "Fellow Americans, it is with the utmost pride and sincerity that I present this recording, as a living testiment and recollection of history in the making during our generation." Chris PhenomenalWith that, the voice of Chris Phenomenal jumps in.
Allow me to re-introduce myself. My name is HOV!
“Public Service Announcement" begins to play as Chris Phenomenal emerges from the back, in a long boxing style robe with Senator coming out behind him, his signature cane aiding his gate, and standing at his side as he stops at the top of the entrance ramp. Head down covered by the hood, Chris makes the sign of the cross and then kisses his chain, holding it to his lips for a second all while swaying back and forth to the beat of the music. Chris then drops the chain from his hands, throwing his arms outwards as the pyro’s on either side of the entrance ramp explode as he makes his way down to the ring, fully focused as Senator whispers a few last minute words of advice in his ear. Reaching the bottom. Chris climbs into the ring between the second and third ropes and immediately goes into his corner and throws a few punches at the turnbuckle, no gesturing or taunting, focused purely on the ring and nothing else. Finally he drops the hood as Senator ducks in to the ring from his corner, patting Chris on the shoulder. McNally: You could cut the tension with a knife in here right now. Edison: I don’t deny that Maxxy. It’s not every day that you get to see Yoko Satoshi step into the ring, especially not on free TV. With that the haunting chimes that proceed the saxophone in Flower of Carnage hit the arena sound system as the crowd rises to their feet in anticipation of the young Japanese warrior. McNally: Here we go Eddie. Edison: For the first time in over two years, Yoko Satoshi, wrestling live on Wednesday Night Warfare. Jones: And his opponent. Making her way to the ring, standing five feet, six inches tall. With that, the melodic voice of Meiko Kaiji comes over the top and the Flower of Carnage herself steps out onto the entrance ramp, the familiar school girl uniform adorned with gold, five title belts in total; her Yokoweight title featured prominently around her waist, the ACW Diva title in one hand, The two retired tag team title belts over her shoulder and her own current tag team title belt in the other hand. The crowd in awe cheers as behind Yoko steps Sarin carrying her own title belt down to the ring. YOKO SATOSHI!The two begin there descent on the ring, numerous flashes going off and many fans fighting to get closer to the rail to see the two. Chris Phenomenal however stands in his corner, not saying a word to Senator, nor receiving instruction, instead standing eyes closed, going over in his head what he needs to do to come out victorious. As Yoko ducks through the ropes Chris finally opens his eyes and looks at her as the music dies out. McNally: Eddie, can Chris Phenomenal do this? Can he end the streak of the one they call “Yokoberg?” Edison: I honestly don’t know if he can. He’s got the physical tools to do it but even with the Senator in his corner I don’t know if he’s mentally strong enough to defeat him. That being said, we’ve counted Chris out before and he’s proven us wrong. Yoko Satoshi stares across the ring at Chris Phenomenal as she passes each and every single title to belt to Sarin Rossi. In the meanwhile Chris slips out of the flowing robe, removes his chain, giving it one final nod and passes it off to Senator before bouncing back in forth in his corner as referee Raymond Allen Fleming, working double duty this evening calls for the bell.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:46:10 GMT -5
The call for the bell brings both competitors fighting spirit to life as Chris tugs on the ring ropes once and cracks his neck as Yoko Satoshi looks on, a wicked smile on her face as she comes out of her corner, meeting Chris in the center of the ring. Chris looks down at her for a moment before spinning his hips and the two begin to circle each other. Chris feigns in and Yoko ducks out, trying to avoid direct confrontation. On her back foot however, Chris loads up the right hand and pushes off, firing a superman punch right at the head of Yoko, looking for the quick victory and narrowly misses it as Yoko barely swings her body out of the way, before taking Chris down to the mat with a Russian Leg Sweep as he’s caught off balance. Yoko quickly hit’s the rope and looks for a running leg drop but Chris spins out of her path before she can drop and gets up to his feet. The earliest moments coming to a stalemate.
Again the two circle each other, Chris looking for an opening to lock the agile Satoshi down, whilst Yoko springs to action, looking for a quick strike with a kick that Chris bats away and immediately scoops her up with a double leg takedown and plants her onto the canvas back first, the entire force of his weight coming down on her as well. Chris quickly spins over the top and props Yoko up, digging a knee into the back of her neck and tilting it back with a rear chinlock. Chris pulls with all his might but the smaller, flexible Yoko is able to prop herself up right against the hold and jump over the top of Chris in an Asai DDT style counter. Now on his back, Chris tries to muscle the smaller Yoko off of him but Yoko slyly grabs a hold his arm and throws it behind his head before standing up and stomping on the elbow, trying to dislocate the shoulder of Chris. Chris grabs it in pain as Yoko quickly drops the leg across Chris’ throat and stays down for the cover.
…1
Chris doesn’t kick out, instead merely grabbing the leg of Yoko and throwing it off of him.
McNally: Impressive work here from Yoko Satoshi. Using her speed and quickness to throw Chris Phenomenal off of his game.
Edison: I don’t know if she can keep this up the entire length of the match, especially against someone like Chris Phenomenal who seems to have other worldly stamina but this is the best course of action for her.
Yoko quickly gets up to her feet as Chris gets to one knee and fires a punch to her gut, backing her off for a moment and allowing him to get up and avoid a charging clothesline from Yoko, sidestepping it and as she turns around fire a right hand to her face, and then a left jab, another right before capitalizing on the shook Satoshi with a big discus right that knocks her over. Chris hit’s the ropes and charging leaps up for a senton splash but Yoko rolls out of the way, avoiding two hundred and seventy pounds of impact on her ribs. Chris gets up to a knee but that’s as far as he gets as Yoko locks hold and connects with a quick swinging neck breaker and goes for another cover.
…1
Again, Chris kicks out with relative ease getting to his feet, or rather, pulled up by Yoko who hits him with a forearm and then a kick to the ribs before ducking out of the way of an attempted grapple. The two feel each other out, Yoko avoiding the corners but unable to do much damage as Chris has the range ability. On the outside, Senator slaps the mat, telling Chris to go on the attack. Chris looks to go in and Yoko fires a kick but the ploy has worked, Chris ducking back, avoiding the kick and then clamping down Yoko Satoshi, grabbing the long black locks and firing her to the canvas with a modified cravate and slapping in a side headlock, but hooking the one arm in as well, the small arms and head allowing Chris to apply more pressure with the added arm.
McNally: Innovative here from Chris Phenomenal. Yoko used that same arm to aid her escape earlier in the match and Chris takes it away. So much for not having a head there Eddie.
Edison: I’ll give it to him there, not something you’d often see but in this case it works, the slender frame of Yoko bites her in the ass in this form of situation.
Chris rips at the head, trying to forcefully remove it from Yoko’s neck as across the ring Sarin Rossi looks on intently. Catching the eye of her former lover, Yoko use her free arm and reaches behind her before pushing herself up against the knee of Chris who instinctively bends over to try and add pressure. Yoko however sees the move coming a mile away and sits out with jawbreaker that pops her other arm loose. She wastes little time in getting up and looking to take him down with a charging clothesline, leaping into the air trying to add to it. Only problem being the strength of Chris Phenomenal who catches her before turning one hundred and eighty degrees and dropping her with a thundering spine buster. Chris quickly reaches back and hooks the leg, rolling Yoko up so her leg is almost at her mouth.
…1 …2
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:46:32 GMT -5
A kickout, the arm of Yoko sneaking out from under Chris and bringing her shoulder off the canvas. Chris doesn’t allow any time to recover however, rolling to his feet and picking Yoko up by her hair and firing her into the corner before charging in, looking to mash her body between his and the turnbuckle. Yoko however has other ideas, using the ropes to pull herself up into the air like a gymnast, avoiding the contact and as she comes down, putting her leg across the throat of Chris Phenomenal. Chris however is not going to be stopped by a simple turnbuckle bump, catching the leg and using the ropes to steady himself as he catches the rest of the girl and hits her with an inverted atomic drop before spinning her down with a complete shot, sending her nose first into the bottom turnbuckle.
McNally: Innovative counter there by Yoko Satoshi, looking for what could be loosely termed as a YKO. To bad it led to that however.
Edison: And you can’t forget the nose of Yoko Satoshi and the problems it has caused her before. I’d not be surprised if Chris and Senator didn’t briefly watch the triple threat tag match from Heatwave and see how BK London and Jay Zero went right after Yoko’s one area of weakness.
Chris gets to his feet as Yoko Satoshi rolls quickly out of the ring, possibly out of self preservation. As Chris looks down at her as Senator hollers at Chris to “get on her” drawing a few laughs from the surrounding crowd who in turn receive a disapproving look from the Illinois Senator. Chris however ignores the advice of Senator, allowing Yoko to recover on the outside as RAF counts her out.
…3 …4 …5
Yoko looks at Sarin who stands aside, letting Yoko figure this one out on her own. Yoko goes to slide into the ring on one side but Chris stands waiting, looking to put the boots on, forcing her back out as RAF hits seven. She goes around the other side and with the count at nine is forced to come in, despite Chris standing there who pounces like a Hyena, dropping a few boots and then before she can slide back out, dropping a knee onto her back and pulling her back in.
From there Chris pushes back up to his feet and turns the wrist over of Yoko with a standing overhead wristlock, and then driving the knee back in the shoulder, trying to remove the left arm from Yoko’s arsenal. Sarin comes over and stands by Yoko, bidding her to get up as Yoko bends her body against the hold, eventually sliding up to her feet and hits Chris with a kick to the ribs, doubling him over and releasing the hold. Yoko quickly grabs both arms of Chris and looks for the Evenflow DDT but Chris will have none of it, taking the arm out of the hold and using it to quickly turn the underhooks into a kimura on the weakened arm of Yoko before leaning back, throwing Yoko with Chris’ new kimura throw and promptly locking in a crooked head scissors with the half hold.
McNally: A nice counter there from Chris Phenomenal to the attempted DDT from Yoko Satoshi.
Edison: Another one of the moves we’ve not seen from Chris very often. A defensive counter that Senator surely taught Chris for just a situation like this. Wear down Yoko and try and get her off of her game.
Chris takes the top leg and slams it down onto the face of Yoko Satoshi, Senator at ringside telling him to keep the blows shorter, which Chris does, the third and forth quick, short range strikes that threaten to break the nose of Yoko again. The fourth time however Chris raises the leg as high as possible and looks to deliver the finishing blow, coming down right on his own leg as Yoko pulls back out, rolling right over top and out of the kimura hold. With Chris still on the ground Yoko fires a stomp right at his head but he rolls out of the way, dodging the speeding missile, before popping out of the ring, rolling right next to Senator. Chris shakes his head as Senator throws an arm across his neck, whispering something into his ear as Yoko and RAF stare out.
…4 …5
McNally: Mid match counsel here at the sidebar. What do you think Senator is saying here Eddie?
Edison: Everything Chris has tried up and to this point hasn’t worked. He’s tried to push Yoko into submission, only really going for one high impact move. That has to be what he’s going off on, telling Chris he’s not a submission wrestler and needs to focus on the beat down style moves.
…7 …8
Chris ducks into the ring, using the ropes as RAF breaks his count and Yoko looks to capitalize but Chris ducks back out, turning to RAF and ordering him to “back her away.” RAF, following the rules steps in between the two allowing Chris safe passage into the ring. The two circle each other and Chris is able to get hold of Yoko and slip her into a side chancery, eventually taking her down with an Ippon Seoinage and then clamps on the shoulder claw. Yoko fights against it, a reverse elbow and then stands up to her feet before Chris uses his head as a battering ram, slamming it into the back of Yoko stunning her for a moment as Chris pulls one arm up into a strangle hold before delivering another head butt right to the C4 vertebrae and hooks the other arm around Yoko’s neck in a stranglehold before lifting her small frame up and over, slamming her into the canvas with an Aztec Suplex and keeping the hold for the fall.
…1 …2
Yoko throws the shoulder up as Chris looks on smiling, rolling his hips with the strangle hold still in deep and getting up to his feet, stepping through the hold with the stranglehold still in before pulling Yoko down onto his back as he hit’s the canvas with his knees, an impressive inverted stranglehold backbreaker drawing a smile from Senator. Chris gets up and hit’s the ropes running before leaping up into the air and this time connecting with the Senton Splash, and hooking the leg for the cover again.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:46:54 GMT -5
Another kickout, this one more tense however as the pro Satoshi crowd breathes a sigh of relief.
McNally: The fortitude we’ve come to expect from Yoko shows through there, despite three impressive moves back to back to back, she manages to muster the strength to kick out. Her heart bigger than her diminutive stature.
Edison: It’s what has drawn many people to her. Her inspiring story coming from Okinawa to ACW, the smallest and youngest competitor ever to win the World Championship Title, and holding it for the longest amount of time to boot.
Chris gets up off of Yoko and picks her up before dropping her into the corner and driving a shoulder into her sternum, dropping down to one knee and driving thru, focused having shifted from the arm to the ribs. Another massive shoulder block from Phenomenal crumples Yoko and a third one drops her to her knees, Chris backing away throwing his arms into the air in celebration. As Yoko gets to her feet, Chris comes back at her and delivers a stiff boot to her gut that doubles her over as Chris sets himself in position, looking for a Filibuster to end things off. Chris lifts her up into the air, but she starts squirming, trying to free herself from the hold, causing Chris to back up against the ropes, Sarin standing near by as she grabs hold of Chris leg. Chris tries to stomp her hand off as RAF comes in, trying to back Sarin away but the distraction is a enough for Yoko to free herself, using her out stretched hand to grab hold of the ropes and prevent Chris from dropping her down onto the mat. She tries to spin her legs to throw Chris out of the ring but Chris counters instead, dropping Yoko off of his shoulders and as soon as her feet hit the canvas he delivers a charging, elbow smash right to her face as she turns around, rocking her world as she hit’s the canvas.
Chris ignores Yoko however, instead looking down at Sarin and quickly stepping out of the ring as Sarin looks on, ready to throw down at a moment’s notice.
Chris Phenomenal: Look at what the cat dragged in. Got tired of eatin’ butch and figured Asian would be nice?
Chris and Sarin stare each other down as Yoko is getting to her feet in the ring, clutching her face. Senator running over to Chris.
Senator: Chris, get back in the ring. Maintain your focus.
…3 …4
Chris looks at Sarin before turning his attention back to the ring and is caught by the flying Yoko, the Yokocanrana connecting as she sends Chris flying into the steel ring steps as Senator looks on.
…6 …7
Yoko gets up to her feet and slides into the ring as the count continues on. Senator looks at Chris, still in a crumpled heap and then at Sarin, retreating away. Without a moments hesistation Chris grabs Chris and rolls him in under the bottom rope, just before the ten count hits, prolonging the match.
McNally: Senator saves Chris Phenomenal there.
Edison: I’m not sure if save would be the right word. That’s like taking Chris out of the line of a firing squad and in turn throwing him into a lions den. It all depends on the way you want to go.
Yoko goes right after Chris, picking him up after putting a few boots to him and whips across the ring into the ropes, before coming off her own side and connecting with a vicious Bunny Knee, right to Chris’ skull, dropping him like a sack of potatoes. Yoko quickly covers.
…1 …2 …
Chris kicks out at two and a lot, prolonging the match again for a moment as Yoko rolls to her feet, lining Chris up, ready to end it all with a Flying Guillotine. It takes a few moments for Chris to get to his feet, Senator banging on the ropes trying to warn Chris but he appears to be on dream street as he stumbles right into the toe kick of Yoko who wastes no time in leaping into the air, looking for the Flying Guillotine but Chris backs out just before the leg of Yoko comes crashing down at the top of his neck. Chris stumbles out of the ring, toppling between the second and third ropes as Senator stays away, content to let Chris figure this one out on his own as RAF leans over the ropes and begins the count again.
…1 …2 …3
Chris turns back and raises his middle finger at RAF, telling him to “shove it” As he takes another moment to gather his thoughts. Everything he’s thrown at Yoko over the course of the match hasn’t worked. Not the power offence, not the brute submissions, there seems to be no weakness in the small school girl.
…5 …6 …7
Chris Phenomenal: Fuck!
…8
Chris steps back into the ring, Yoko allowing Chris in like a sportsmen as the two look at each other, ready to go the final round. The two circle each other, Sarin slapping the mat in encouragement as Senator just stares, knowing that Chris has what it takes. Yoko takes the advantage off the tie up, ducking under Chris’ grapple attempt and taking his back before stepping onto his left knee, forcing him down to one before firing a high kick that Chris ducks before popping back up to his knee, Yoko is ready however as she spins around and fires a kick that crushes the ribs of Chris, doubling him over allowing her to connect with her vicious faceturn, slamming Chris face first into the mat.
McNally: Face Turn from Yoko Satoshi that has too end it.
Edison: A valiant effort from Chris Phenomenal has to end here, the punishment this man has sustained, surely this is it.
RAF doesn’t hesitate, sliding his hand under Chris shoulders as he palms the canvas.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:47:25 GMT -5
… NO!
Somehow, someway, just before the arm of RAF falls for the third and final time Chris throws the shoulder up, Senator cracking a smile at ringside, revelling in the fortitude of his protégé. Yoko looks down in disbelief, knowing exactly what she has to do to put Chris down, Flying Guillotine. Yoko leans over and tries to pull Chris up, struggling trying to, only able to get him up to one knee before the arms give out and Chris collapses down again. Yoko looks down, confused, before turning to RAF who steps in, counting the knock out blow.
…1 …2 …3
Chris turns his face however and looks over at Senator smiling, who in turn delivers a small wink back as Chris wait’s a couple more seconds.
…5 …6
Chris pushes himself up to one knee, as Yoko steps in, hastening to get Chris up to his feet before all of the sudden she’s on the ground, flat on her back with Chris hooking the leg on an inside cradle out of no way, pulling one of Senator’s tricks out of the bag. It even takes RAF a second to spring into action, pouncing to the mat with the call.
…1 …2 …
NO! This time it’s Yoko who narrowly staves off defeat, managing to free herself from the bind created as Chris rolls off, quite possibly having exhausted every last trick in the bag. Not willing to go down however, Chris pulls himself up with Yoko in turn, eating a forearm blow but delivering one back. A second exchange ensues before Chris looks to shock the world with a spring Superman Punch out of nowhere but Yoko has it well scouted, deftly ducking out of the way and as Chris turns around Yoko delivers a kick to the midsection, trying to double over Chris but he refuses to, standing strong. A second blow doesn’t bend him over as Yoko begins to grow flustered trying to bend Chris over for her Flying Guillotine. A third blow doesn’t do it so Yoko decides to dig deeper into the bag of tricks, charging at the ropes and running up them before leaping back off, looking for the Kriss Kross. As she soars through the air, Chris looks up, knowing if this connects it’s over and with every last ounce of determination in his body he leaps up around the kick, spinning around Yoko and connecting with a flying Switch Blade, both of them slamming hard into the canvas.
Edison: DANGEROUS!
McNally: Holy Dina, I don’t know how Chris Phenomenal managed to pull that off. He was down and out, ready to say good night and somehow, someway. He MIGHT just be able to do this Eddie.
Edison: I don’t know. He’s putting up quite the fight. I don’t think we’ve seen Yoko pushed this far since Omega Effect against Rattlesnake.
McNally: And don’t forget, Chris beat Rattlesnake, two months in a row and we’ve not seen him since.
Both Yoko and Chris are down and out for the count, there respective seconds standing at ringside, trying to give them the added boost, trying to get them to rise as RAF stands over both, making sure they’re down before starting the ten count.
…1 …2 …3
No movement from either person.
…4 …5
Yoko turns her head, looking over at her former lover and tag team partner Sarin, before turning and looking at Chris. The man she asked for the match against, having pushed her to a near breaking point. On Chris side he looks down at the canvas, his heart slamming against his chest cavity, his mind racing. “I’ve gotten this far, I can’t give in now.”
…6 …7
Both of the competitors push themselves up to a knee, looking at each other, their gazes coming together for the slightest of moments, the count of RAF breaking there connection.
…8 …9
*CLAP!*
The sound of RAF’s hands coming together, both competitors to their feet draws a stirring ovation from the faithful, giving both a renewed sense of vigor, Yoko charging at Chris and connecting with a flying clothesline that knocks Chris over but this time he’s quick to his feet as Yoko comes off the ropes and connects with another one that knocks Chris over again. This time he’s a little slower as Yoko stops this time and once Chris gets up Yoko grabs hold of both arms, setting him up into position for the Mark of the Rose, Alexandra Kaiser’s old finishing maneuver. Chris is helpless to defend himself as Yoko throws Chris down to the mat. Out of desperation however, Chris reaches out, grabbing a hold of RAF and bringing him down with them as Chris eats dirt. Yoko is quick to her feet, ready to finish Chris off once and for all with the second half of the combination as Chris keeps RAF pinned down. Yoko gets to the ropes and leaps off them, looking for the Mark of the Beast, Ridley, “The Lord of Hardcore” having passed the move on.
*THWACK!*
McNally: What the?
Edison: That sly, foul politician. Poking his nose into affairs again.
The sound heard is that of Yoko slamming into the canvas face first, Senator having grabbed hold as she looks for the Quebrada and sending her plummeting to the canvas. The sound however brings RAF back into the picture, pushing off Chris Phenomenal who had aptly turned RAF away from the action. Spying Senator right by the scene of the crime, RAF knows exactly what has just happened.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:47:58 GMT -5
Mid Match Segment: Cue Senatorial Rant. Senator and CP
As RAF walks over to Senator, the man himself throws his arms in the air, looking up at RAF pleading innocent. The senior official however buys none of it, pointing down at Yoko, now at his feet. Senator just shrugs his shoulders as RAF leans over the ropes.
RAF: What do you take me for Phillips, a carnival mark?
Senator: What I take you for is an esteemed senior referee, who would seen me commit this transgression or not and would refrain from jumping to conclusions about my acts.
RAF: Get off your horse Phillips, Yoko here, you there, it’s quite easy to put two and two together.
Senator: Indeed it is, two and two is always four, however in this case we are not dealing with mathematics, we are dealing with a wrestling match that you have obviously turned your attention away from right now. I would suggest then that your undivided focus be returned to the task at hand.
RAF: Not until I am done dealing with you.
Senator: And what shall I take that to mean, Raymond? Are we harboring a personal grudge?
RAF: No, I am not. I am making sure this contest is decided by the two competitors, and not on the intervention of other parties.
Senator: I have not interfered in this match however and resent you implying as such.
RAF: Steven, you may mistake me as being of less intelligence than yourself and while that may be true, I am certain that this is a result of your work.
Senator: And I assure you that it is not. Now, both competitors are fallen, I suggest you begin a ten count.
RAF: I’m…
Senator: ONE!
RAF: You…
Senator: TWO!
RAF: Would you cut that out and listen for a moment.
With that said, RAF’s eyes bugging out, finger waving in front of Phillips, Phillips grabs hold and begins to bend the finger back, illegal joint manipulation in the ring but here perfectly legal as RAF quickly grimaces in pain.
Senator: I suggest you keep your fingers to yourself, I would hate to see one forcefully removed.
Senator lets go as RAF shakes his hand looking like he is going to turn his attention back to the match as Phillips begins to walk away. RAF however turns his back and calls out to man.
RAF: Phillips, that’s assault on an ACW official on behalf of…
Before RAF can finish however Senator turns back and stares at RAF before leaping up on the canvas and unleashing a massive tirade as only Senator Steven Phillips could do.
Senator: On behalf of whom. I do not see myself attacking Ms. Satoshi here giving Chris an unfair advantage, I am not interrupting a pin fall attempt by Chris Phenomenal in order to save Yoko. Instead I find myself this time at the receiving end of your prejudices, claiming that I have committed acts I would not do. You said it yourself nary thirty seconds ago, my intelligence is above and beyond most everyone in this arena, so why would I make it so obvious, so blatant that I am interfering as you claimed, tripping Yoko on the ropes and making a loud splat on the canvas. Would it not have been better for me to grab her, bring her outside the ring, muffle her voice and unleash a torrent of offence, a Public Option or even Filibuster her right into these steel ring steps.
Senator stomps on the ring steps.
Senator: I could have done so much more to hurt Yoko then to simply trip her up and if I was out here to interfere on the behalf of Chris Phenomenal then why would I not do such a thing, surely that would have given him more of an advantage than simply “tripping” Yoko.
Senator takes a deep breath, re-gathering himself as the crowd gathered in attendance begins to cheer a bit. It is not often they see Senator work himself up, but when he does, the sure entertainment value is worth more than the price of admission or any disdain they may care.
Senator: And what about Ms. Rossi over there. Earlier in the match I am all but certain you saw her trip up Chris Phenomenal, interfering with his opportunity to win but you choose to do nothing. What is it Raymond, this is perverse sexual discrimination, the female can get away with any misdeeds she chooses, while the law abiding, law making male is threatened and called a cheater. The only way it makes sense, in fact, proves what I already know about yourself Raymond is that you are the most corrupt official in this company and this proves my accusations.
Another deep breath from Senator
Senator: Somehow, someway, Yoko, Sarin or there representatives paid you off along the way, knowing the value of Yoko’s winning streak was too high, but also that Chris could easily defeat her and put an end to it. They knew that they needed some form of assistance and they went through the easiest way, straight to the referee. Now Chairman Jonathan Gingerdude, for whatever faults the man has at least realized this is a distinct possibility and pays his referees a top dollar to dissuade the allure of easy money. In this case however, Raymond, I assume greed got the best of you, not contented to live off the sum of money allotted for you, more than some of our wrestlers might I had, you decided to fix this match in favor of Yoko Satoshi.
As Senator continues on, Chris is just trying to get to his feet, the Mark of the Rose having done some serious damage. Yoko is already up to her feet and looks across the ring at her tag team partner, now standing in it, ready to exact some revenge on Chris Phenomenal for his earlier tasteless words.
Senator: I ought to place you under citizens arrest and quickly get Mr. Makabe down here to finish off this match. At least he knows the proper conduct of an ACW official and not to abuse the highest authority bestowed upon him.
As RAF just shakes his head, Senator now demonstrating with a vicious knife edge chops, The Deadline maneuver that has ended many a career.
--End Segment--
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:48:25 GMT -5
*THUD!*
Still dealing with the Senator, RAF is oblivious to what has just happened, Sarin and Yoko standing over top of Chris Phenomenal. Having just connected with the skull crushing Rinko Kick. As the two share a faint smile, Sarin leans over and whispers something in Chris’ ear before rolling him over and scampering out of the ring as Yoko covers Chris, RAF still busy arguing with Senator.
Crowd: ONE!
The shout of one draws RAF’s attention as he peaks over his shoulder and sees Yoko covering Chris and tries to get back to make the count. Senator however, having seen everything that has just occurred, grabs hold of RAF, knowing it’s Chris’ only chance of surviving the kick that has ended careers as well as many a tag team title dream. The Kings of Satire, Weapons of Mass Destruction, G-Unit. The most elite tag teams the company has ever known have not found an answer to this.
Senator: In fact I will, Raymond Allen Fleming, I am placing you under citizens arrest for the felonious crime of match fixing. Now, I would…
Crowd: TWO!
RAF tries to break free of Senator’s grip but the old man holds on for dear life. RAF tries to chop the hand of Senator, before pulling away but still the hands, strengthened from a number of years of submission wrestling hold strong, just as if RAF was stuck in his very own Victory Lock I.
Senator: And tack assault onto that as well Mr. Fleming
RAF looks out at the crowd, trying to break free from the clutches of Senator, going wild as they shout.
Crowd: THREE!
Finally, RAF breaks free, a quick twist and tug allowing him to break free of Senator, or quite possibly the threat of disqualification of Chris Phenomenal forces Senator to let go. RAF sprints, his legs churning as quick as possible as he slides into position, the hand expertly sliding as he gets there and starts the official count, finally coming as Yoko looks into the senior officials eyes, the pinfall having already been in for five seconds.
…1
McNally: This has to be it, no one kicks out of the Rinko kick.
…2
Edison: Despite the best efforts of Senator Chris has no chance here. Those two kicking your skull simultaneously, that’s like sending your brain through a meat grinder.
… … …3!
NO!
The cheers are silenced as RAF rolls over flapping his arms waving off the fall. A hush comes over the crowd, stunned that Chris has managed to survive as the Alpha Tron focuses in on the foot of Chris Phenomenal resting on the bottom rope as Yoko, and Sarin at ringside, look on in disbelief with the rest of the live audience and the millions watching on there televisions at home.
McNally: This is incredible. Leave it to these two to put on a match that brings the crowd to there feet.
Edison: Possibly Match of the Year contender here tonight Maxxy, and on free TV as well.
Yoko rolls up to her feet, knowing that she has Chris’ on the ropes. The Mark of the Rose having kept him down longer than usual, the skull crushing impact of the Rinko Kick, and Chris’ history of head problems surely having cost him this match, the end nearing as Yoko lines him up, ready to attack with the Flying Guillotine. Chris struggles to his feet, fighting against the headache, the body fatigue and a number of throbbing contusions as Yoko delivers another kick to the head that doubles Chris over. Setting him up, he’s there, ripe for the taking with the Flying Guillotine. Yoko lines him up, leaping into the air, coming down and catching nothing but the arms of Chris Phenomenal, catching her, setting her down and shifting her grip, ready to capitalize with a Filibuster but Yoko fights out, forcing Chris to whip her into the ropes, on the rebound Chris swings his arm, looking for a clothesline, anything to bide him time but Yoko ducks it and as Chris turns around, Yoko delivers a final kick, right to the chest of Chris Phenomenal, causing him to slump over. Senator slams his fist into the canvas, but at least on this night, Chris has taken enough punishment it seems as Yoko quickly leaps into the air, the leg outstretched coming down right on the neck of Chris Phenomenal, sending him face first into the canvas.
McNally: That’s it, that’s it. Flying Guillotine from Yoko Satoshi.
Edison: I’d hold your horses there Eddie, every time you’ve called the match, Chris has managed to kick out.
Yoko is forced to take a moment to catch her breath, the match having pushed her as far as she can go as she rolls over Chris Phenomenal, expending any last reserves as her pin consists of laying across the shoulders of Chris, with RAF counting.
…1
Senator: Come on Chris, you have her in the palm of your hand.
…2
Sarin: Please, just let this end.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on Nov 18, 2009 16:48:51 GMT -5
… 3!
And this time, there is no kickout, no foot on the ropes, just Chris Phenomenal lying face up, Yoko Satoshi resting on top of him, both having gone above and beyond their limits. The crowd roars as Yoko raises her head as the bell tolls and the voice of Phillip Jones fills the arena.
Jones: Here is your winner…YOKO SATOSHI!
Yoko turns her head and sees Sarin climbing into the ring, no longer lovers but still, at least hopefully friends as she aids Yoko to her feet before raising her arm high in the air, RAF getting the Yokoweight title from Phillip Jones and placing it around her waist, despite the bout not being a Yokoweight title match, the significance of the match going above and beyond that. Yoko looks at the crowd, cheering, chanting her name and then down at Chris Phenomenal for a second, the man who has once again amazed the audience at what a poor boy could eventually do with the right amount of will. In part, although none in attendance would admit it, the cheers are for him as Senator looks on at ringside for a moment at Chris, even in defeat proud.
Yoko ascends the back right turnbuckle and poses for the crowd, the show cutting to black for the final time with the image of her smiling face.
END SHOW!
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Post by Trent Wheeler on Nov 18, 2009 18:05:11 GMT -5
Was not expecting that awesome main event. Epic.
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Post by Kim Jong CP on Nov 18, 2009 18:15:56 GMT -5
I'm going to do feedback tonight, but I've got a few questions that I was hoping someone or two could answer. Been a while that I've written matches here, but mostly for myself so was wondering what people thought of them. A few guides/key's I'm worried about.
A) Pacing. Is it good? Does it resemble a real match, or is it just two slow. B) Opening. I often find myself three pages in (+entrances) and not really having done many spots, where as people like Torak are non step spots. Do you like this? Does it make it feel more realistic? C) Length. Are they too long? too short? Perfect?
Thanks in advance for whoever does this.
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Post by Jason Freeman on Nov 18, 2009 22:24:06 GMT -5
Freeman Feedback I am finally caught up in shows so can do feedback now. I am going to be brutally honest people, so ACCEPT IT. In all seriousness, I tend to point out the nitpicks and problems I have more than the good points, so just becuase I criticize doesn't mean I didn't like it. yes, I tend to point out more negatives than positives, but one needs to hear both sides, right? Return of the King (Chris Phenomenal) – Lord of the Rings reference gets me sucked in instantly! We all know CP never actually read that though because he can’t read, and is a C English student. So he probably saw the movie. While I’m criticizing CP, I will say that he should know it’s “their wallets” not “there wallets.” Also, a random criticism is that CP tends to use commas really awkwardly. I know I overuse them, but he either has them in the wrong place of sentences, or starts using them and then randomly stops leading to an awkward sentence structure. Okay, okay, I’m nitpicking just because it’s CP and it’s fun. The segment was fine, and I like when matches are made during the show for later that night, just like they would be on TV, rather than being announced on the match card. I’ve always liked things like that. Otherwise there’s not much to say about this segment. It was a segment made to drive the plot along and it did fine at that. A Wolf’s Call to a Panther (And an Unsteady Partnership) (Trent Wheeler) – Ooh, Wheeler stole Jefferson’s centered text! I dunno, that just seems very signature Jefferson to me, so it was weird. Also, this segment kinda confused me. Is Wheeler feuding with Panther? Maybe if he was I just forgot, but I don’t remember them really having a feud. I don’t get why he’s cool with the mob boss now, and why the mob boss is actually booking him good matches. And I also don’t like when newer people use cage matches for lower midcard matches without much feud. It waters down gimmick matches, and makes us like TNA. Wheeler has some potential I think. I could see him as ET champion. Jefferson Smash~! (Jack Jefferson/Jonny Hughes) – To be honest, I don’t really see the point of this segment, as far as the Jefferson/Hughes feud goes. It was kinda funny I guess though. I’ve been getting the feeling that Jefferson has been writing this whole Jefferson/Hughes thing, though this wasn’t centered so maybe this was Hughes? I guess Hughes must have done this outline as otherwise there’d be no point to credit him. Either way though, I think a Jefferson/Hughes feud would be great if Hughes was at his best, but he hasn’t really been writing much if at all, which is sad because Hughes at his best is amazing. I feel like Hughes has never had a really good consistent run and I’d like to see him have one, because he’s proven that when he’s on he’s ON. Sizing up the Competition ( VorteX and Criminal) – What I don’t like about VorteX is I feel he has no character, or at least I can’t get a real grip on his personality. What I DO like about him, is that he’s making the ET title look good, and defending it like mad. Another segment showing some competition for his belt. Criminal has a ways to go, though, before he’s ready. Criminal, be sure to use correct grammar etc, and capitalize your I’s. I’d say if I had to choose one contender for VorteX’s title ATM, it’d probably have to be Wheeler out of the lower midcarders, though I think VorteX should remain champ for a while. Down to Business ( SheltonSplash and Dave Shadow) – I REALLY don’t like the whole format of SheltonSplash’s segments, with his dialogue being centered and in italics without saying his name before it. I guess it’s just different, I just don’t like it. I also hate how SheltonSplash sounds like a messageboard username, which of course it must have been. That’s a really dumb name for a wrestler obviously. Like Gingerdude, but at least we could say that’s his last name, even if it’s a strange one to have. I dunno, I obviously wasn’t in GWF so maybe Shelton will win me over. People obviously marked out for him, so maybe I just need to warm up to him. Whatever. I just didn’t really like this that much. No offense. Vignette of a Linchpin (Cordelia) – How does Torak put this much effort into getting pics before every segment? 0_0 I feel like Torak puts way too much effort into all his stuff, though I guess it’s a good thing. I always feel Torak’s segments run long, and have way too much description. And I also don’t like when one person controls three different characters. I also don’t like the format without saying their name before it, and the whole fact that everything seems like a small novel. Yes this is all negative, but here’s the thing. Torak is an amazing writer, definitely the best we’ve got, so of course I can’t say the segment was bad or the writing was. Of course both were amazing as always, so don’t take what I’m saying the wrong way! I’m just saying my problems with it, not that you should change it, since what you’re doing is great as is. And I Run, I Run So Far Away (Run Away and Thunderkiss) – Not one of my favorite segments. I really don’t like the Run Away character. It reminds me of a segment XS3 did during his world title feud which was all random nonsense stuff and I didn’t like it. I don’t like when XS3 does that stuff, but I loved XS3’s writing when he was just turned heel (or almost heel <_<) during that feud. He’s a great writer but I don’t love the character. Worth my While (Jack Jefferson/Jonny Hughes) – What happened to Hughes’s cool blue font? I like it much better than what he’s got going on in these Jefferson segments, but I hope it’s because Jefferson is writing the outline and not because he’s done with the color. Anyways, pretty good segment, but again it felt like Jefferson wrote the whole thing. I love the idea of title vs career Jefferson vs Hughes for the Supercard, but think this could have been AMAZING if Hughes was in top form (or even writing at all <_<.) It makes me sad how much potential was wasted. If Hughes is going to lose and go out, which I assume is the case, I wish it could have been with a blaze of glory. Ah, well. Chris and Dave face to face, cue fisticuffs. (Dave Shadow and Chris Phenomenal) – Don’t really buy Dave mocking Chris from behind him, considering that I would think the situation between them does not call for jokes, and that Dave would not really be in the mood to mock him, more to furiously want to kill him <_<. Also “I’ve been listening to you rabbit on.” WTF? Was that supposed to say ramble or something or is this some phrase I don’t know? This segment was kind of weird to me, mostly Dave was acting kind of off IMO. That’s not to say it was bad. This feud up until Samhain was one of the greatest things in a while, with the whole attacker angle. It’s kind of lost a bit of momentum since the phenomenal segment near the end of EOTR (Amazing job with that one BTW guys.), but that’s not to say it can’t gain it again. I’d assume it’d need to take a backseat so Dave can challenge Jefferson at Winter’s Discontent though. Panther does stuff, you read it, I get calcs, rinse repeat <____< (Red Panther) – I approve of the title of this segment. The actual segment I don’t know how I feel about. It was alright I guess. Champion vs Champion vs Champion match – Not going to comment on the match just going to wonder the logic behind this match, as of course Jefferson is going to win. I dunno, whatever. Also, Spade was pinned and I believe that’s because VorteX honestly probably has more calcs than Spade does right now. Spade hasn’t even been on the show…I don’t think Spade should be IN champ, not because he doesn’t deserve it per se, but because there are others (like Chris Phenomenal who should have kept it <_<) who deserve it more and have been writing more. That’s all. Spade has been alright lately but IN champ is a BIG thing IMO. To go from Dave to CP to Spade is kind of a downstep, because he hasn’t been doing that much. What do you Want From me ( Run Away/ Thunderkiss) – Still don’t like Run Away. I suppose it was kind of amusing though. Mid-match Segment (Senator) – I. Love. This. Senator. Gimmick. Where he does these awesome mid-match segments where he distracts the ref with these insane rants. I love it. This is one of the most awesome things Sen has ever done. This needs to happen every CP match. Main Event According to Trent Wheeler it was epic. Maybe it was. I’ll read it later but it’s getting late. So all in all, not that great a show. There were no standout great segments and a lot of missing faces. The build to the supercard could be better, but it isn’t bad. It seems from what I remember there are three matches so far announced, Panther/Wheeler which IMO shouldn’t be a cage match, CP/Splash, and Jefferson/Hughes. Jefferson/Hughes is certainly a worthy main event but could have been better with a better feud. For a world champ I feel Jefferson needs some more presence to the shows. Spade is our new IN champ but isn’t even here. I can see that title shifting soon. VorteX will probably remain ET champ for a while, and Jefferson better be careful because he’s got Shadow next month, and all in all I’d say Shadow is the best part of the fed right now. I think he’s just amazing. SEE YOU ALL NEXT WEEK WITH A SUPERCARD!!!!
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Post by Kim Jong CP on Nov 18, 2009 23:38:11 GMT -5
A Wolf’s Call to a Partner. Not a bad segment, nor is it an epic one but that’s not what I’d expect here. I’ve been a fan of this Boss Wolf angle and the managers twist is really good, that gives Wheeler a few nice options. As far as the announcement of the cage match, I’m a little torn as I think there is enough build in this and the cage match is well fitting with the angle. My only problem is that this is 3 big shows in a row with Panther doing a gimmick match and it is reaching a little much. This angle between the two has been done well though.
Jefferson Smash. Funny little segment here. Good to see that Hughes has got to Jefferson a bit. I really do like the Jefferson character as is, the near twisted, violent, sociopath who’s on a fuckin’ roll through everyone in ACW at the moment. Also, I’m sure this wasn’t meant to play off the Kofi-Orton thing as well considering the amount of wrestling these two watch.
Sizing Up The Competition. I’m not to sure where I stand on this one to be honest. I like the interaction with the new guys and it does help get the new guys some exposure but I really at this point and time don’t “get” Criminal yet. In both segments he’s talked about his wrestling and how he’s not lost yet and while that’s fine and dandy, I don’t get a sense of who he is from his work. I think I’d suggest two thigns.
A) Get a name aside from Criminal. It works for a nickname but for someone to only be called Criminal is just off. Something like Timothy Gacey or Coral Dahmer (props for those who can place the names) would go along way towards establishing the character.
B) Go a bit into the backstory of Criminal and why he is what he is. The criminal acts etc. [/blockquote] Down To Business It’s good to see goofy Dave back as well as Shel writing. I’ve already told Shel what I thought of this and if I stroke Dave’s ego any more he’ll likely lose the few hairs he’s got left so I’ll not touch on this one.Vignette of a Lynchpin Contrary to my esteemed Jewish colleague in feedback, I really enjoy Torak’s segments and the length. It’s a lot the same with Dave where his segments are good and short you want more, you almost feel cheated. Torak I feel has achieved the perfect balance where you’re content. I also like the long italics giving the details, something I find I have problems doing. I want to be able to immerse myself in the scene and that’s what Torak enables me to do. In a way his stuff is like when Harry goes into Riddles Diary in Chamber of Secrets. You feel like you’re there and everything.And I Run. I Run So Far Away Quite frankly, I love Mark. ACW wasn’t the same without him and his writing always brings a smile to my face, ever since Steele’s mom. I do love the feud these two are working as it kind of fits well with TK. So serious to get back, finally getting there and now he has to deal with this…joke. I never got to see the Exemplar so I may not have got what I should have at the end, but again I disagree with Mr. Freeman.Worth My While Another segment from the champion and this one I felt was okay. No glitz and glamour but that is Jack Jefferson really. I’m mixed on the title vs. career because kayfabe wise it is a nice touch. Jonny really has not much to lose there and a lot of the reward. However out of character it’s pretty obvious what’s going to happen. When I first came to ACW, I was really impressed with the two guys who “stole my color” Jay Zero and Jonny Hughes. It’s sad that both of them left so soon after I got here as I’d really have liked a chance to get a really good feud going with them.Panther Does Stuff, You Read It, I Get Calcs. Rinse and Repeat. Being blunt, absolutely hated this segment. The thought was there and I get where JDM was going here but I felt there was a lot more that could have been done, especially with the show being next week. I’d have loved to see him except the challenge after blindsiding Wheeler like a coward and accepting the match. I think that would have been a lot more powerful and added something a bit more to the feud.First Main Event VorteX came back to ACW saying he couldn’t write matches and now he’s doing something like this. Having spent a fair portion of time on my match this week, I really do appreciate the effort he put into this, making it a solid co-main event feature. I’m not going to really critique this as much as everyone does have there own style with the writing (kind of bad that I’m asking for a critique on mine and give this answer) but I will say I felt for a Warfare Main Event it was really, really good and well put on here. My only real complaint was the ending as I thought Hughes should have blindsided Jefferson and given VorteX the upset win.What Do You Want From Me. Not going to say much on this one as I really liked it. Only to say that I demand a Thunder Train vs. Run Away feud. We could sell that shit and it’d make an awesome TV show. Props to Mark on the character.[/b]
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Post by VorteX on Nov 19, 2009 0:08:36 GMT -5
Sizing up the Competition ( VorteX and Criminal) – What I don’t like about VorteX is I feel he has no character, or at least I can’t get a real grip on his personality. What I DO like about him, is that he’s making the ET title look good, and defending it like mad. Another segment showing some competition for his belt. Criminal has a ways to go, though, before he’s ready. Criminal, be sure to use correct grammar etc, and capitalize your I’s. I’d say if I had to choose one contender for VorteX’s title ATM, it’d probably have to be Wheeler out of the lower midcarders, though I think VorteX should remain champ for a while. I am interested in what you mean by this Freeman. As in 'no character' do you mean that my backstory is too 'out there'? Most of my character is still a mystery per say so I find what you say here to be partly accurate. The part I'm worried about is people not getting the backstory stuff I'm writing and thus not reading it, so I do appreciate someone speaking out about it. First Main Event VorteX came back to ACW saying he couldn’t write matches and now he’s doing something like this. Having spent a fair portion of time on my match this week, I really do appreciate the effort he put into this, making it a solid co-main event feature. I’m not going to really critique this as much as everyone does have there own style with the writing (kind of bad that I’m asking for a critique on mine and give this answer) but I will say I felt for a Warfare Main Event it was really, really good and well put on here. My only real complaint was the ending as I thought Hughes should have blindsided Jefferson and given VorteX the upset win. I appreciate the feedback here. In all honesty I wasn't going to take this match as I was scared off by the whole Main Event factor, however I figured writing something is better than having nothing. I am still trying to figure out a 'time format' as in making the match so many 'minutes' long, and this one may have been a little segmented here and there. Also in regards to Freeman's comment, I think the logic behind this was more of an exposure thing to put prestige back towards the belts, however I'm not on the booking committee so that's pure speculation. I knew I was going to lose the match, however I didn't really care as the point was to entertain and not to add to my record status.
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