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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on May 17, 2009 15:41:36 GMT -5
Hollywood grabs a hold of Jake Steele, who get’s his first offensive shot in for the past five minutes as he fires a weak right to the gut of Mach which doesn’t faze him in the least, in fact it comes as a welcome reminder that Jake Steele is still in the match and deserves to eat another fist, which he promptly does as he stumbles back into the ring area, and starts heading up the steps trying to escape from Mach. Mach slowly stalks Jake Steele as he walks up the stairs and fires a right hand to the skull of Jake Steele who eats it again. Macho circles back around Jake Steele and fires a few rights backing him up towards the edge of a steep drop into the crowd below. Mach backs up and looks to hit Jake Steele with a clothesline to send him off but Jake ducks out of the way and as Mach turns around he is caught with a LIONS ROAR from Jake Steele, half out of desperation. Like his Mega Star Alliance teammate Chris Phenomenal last week, Mach tumbles over the edge into a throng of about thirty people. Jake Steele struggles to get up as the referee count’s them both out, and once he does the referee restarts his count, this time solely for Hollywood Mach.
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Hollywood is too his feet but so is Jake Steele, the roar of the crowd willing energy into his body that he otherwise wouldn’t have, the hopes of the people empowering him. He climbs onto the stage, a little but unsteady but it appears as if the natural ability has finally returned, the emperor has got his groove back. Jake Stands on the edge and Mach stumbles before Jake leaps off and lands on Mach, connecting with the EXPLODING GLORY as both men are again down but the crowd pops as Jake Steele has managed to regain control of the match. It once again takes him a few seconds to get up but once he does the referee begins his count for Mach once again.
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Mach is too his feet again as Jake Steele charges and looks to hit him with a RIGHT IN YO’ FACE!, but he misses instead connecting with a fan wearing an old Simply Phenomenal ECF T-Shirt as Mach looks on. The two begin to scrap back towards the ring, Jake Steele having finally gotten back into the flow of the match after the slow start. Mach still having somewhat of an advantage but it is not as pronounced as earlier.
McNally: Jake Steele is back in the game Eddie.
Edison: It’s like Rocky Balboa Max, take everything your opponent has then come back for more.
McNally: The damage he’s sustained however can’t be overlooked Eddie, you don’t just miraculously recover from the injuries he’s sustained.
Jake Steele manages to get the last punch in that sends Mach tumbling back over the barricade back into the ring area as he climbs over himself, still a little week on his feet but managing alright. Jake reaches under the ring and roots around for a weapon he likes, coming out with a baseball bat that he’s used before. Jake smiles and like Hollywood before with the chair, cracks Mach in the ribs with a few hard shots before slamming it into his back knocking him over. Jake scurries under the ring and comes out with a microwave. Mach gets to his feet but isn’t there for long as Jake takes it and smashes him in the head, Mach crawling down. Jake opens up the microwave and throws the head of the Mach in and starts slamming the door on it, over, and over and over before finally backing way and taking his bat and smashing the microwave to pieces with Hollywoods head inside. Jake tires fast however and stumbles back towards the ring, and manages to take a seat on the edge as the referee begins to count Hollywood out.
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Hollywood gets to his feet, the microwave still on his head as he wanders around like the pumpkin head man, as Jake Steele crushes his innards with a whirlwind kick that manages to knock the wind out of Hollywood, and as he stumbles back against the barricade he manages to pull the microwave off of his head, just in time to be met by an Exploding Heights from Jake Steele sending the two topping up the entrance ramp. Jake decides to take a rest, taking a seat while grabbing and electrical cord and wrapping it around the throat of Hollywood Mach and pulling back as hard as he can to choke the life out of him as the match reaches the twenty minute mark.
McNally: Jake Steele is doing everything in his power to end this before he gasses out.
Edison: It’s going to be a dog fight to the bitter end though.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on May 17, 2009 15:41:56 GMT -5
Mach is finally able to pry the cord off of his neck and fires a reverse elbow to the skull of Jake Steele allowing him to get to his feet and then hits him with a big right hand, but eats one from Jake Steele as well, the two stumble back towards the ring with Mach back in control, Jake Steele not able to keep up with Hollywood’s strength advantage allowing him to be whipped into the ring first. This works to his advantage however as a burst of energy allows him to get to his feet as Mach gets into the ring and is met by the foot of Jake Steele who uses the ropes to help support him, Mach makes his way to his feet but Jake comes back with some feared chops, booker T style as he goes after Hollywood and forces him back into the corner before eventually connecting with an impressive manoeuvre, grabbing the hold of Mach’s head and spring boarding over the top rope to the outside, causing Mach to snap off of the top rope and fall back in to the corner. Steele took the moment to catch his breath as Mach was counted out by the referee reaching five before getting to his feet. Steele was already up however on the top rope and as Mach reached the solid base, Steele reached out and connected with a 360 degree variant of the Broken Legacy, power Hollywood Mach down onto the lid of the trash can that had entered the ring earlier. Jake quickly rolled away from Mach to the outside, once again taking every opportunity to catch his breath whilst also looking under the ring for another weapon, the ones in the ring still not fitting his agenda until finally he emerged with what he was looking for, a good old fashioned ten pin bowling ball. Mach needed the ropes to pull himself up at five but Jake wouldn’t even allow him to get their, pulling his feet out from underneath him tripping him up and pulling him to the outside. Jake grabbed the Kendo stick still lying close at hand and exacted some revenge from earlier, coming back with a few shots of his own before handing the Stick to a fan in the audience who got a chance at Hollywood Mach. Jake took it back and waited for Mach to stumble back around and face him and then THWACK, caught him right between the eyes with a vicious shot that floored him, and brought the first blood of the match opening up a small cut on the top of Mach’s nose.
McNally: There goes Hollywood’s good looks.
Edison: and Jake Steele isn’t finished with him either, he’s got that bowling ball in hand.
McNally: Jake Steele looking to strike.
Edison: Oh you’re a funny man Max.
Jake Steele has the ten pound bowling ball in his hand, Hollywood Mach lined up as he tries to get to his knees. With the former of a pro bowler Steele charages, brings the bawl back but instead of releasing on the down point brings it up right into the skull of Hollywood Mach knocking him flat on his back, the flurry of offense having taken some energy out of Jake Steele as he takes a seat on the steel ring steps as the referee counts Hollywood down.
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Hollywood gets to his feet as Jake Steele nods his head approvingly and climbs off the stairs and grabs Hollywood and sends him back into the ring after a stiff right. Hollywood is slow to his feet as Jake Steele appears to be in a flying state of mind, leaping into the ring with a springboard and looking to hit a hurricanrana on Hollywood Mach but it doesn’t work as Hollywood catches him on his shoulders. Jake knows he’s in no mans land and resorts to unleashing what might be his final flurry of energy and unloads with rights to the top of Hollywoods skull and it seems to work as Hollywood isn’t able to turn the hold into a Macho Slam, instead stumbling towards the ropes allowing Jake Steele to get off, on the top rope. Jake comes with a right but now Mach is able to block it and steps onto the first rope, Jake tries to grab a hold of Hollywood so he can go for a tornado DDT but Mach knocks it away and fires a shot at the ribs of Steele going up to the second rope, and then the third as Jake Steele stands up as well, both men in a precarious position. Mach clubs Jake Steele across the back, and then hits him with a Macho Uppercut sending him stumbling back. Mach looks out at the announce table at ringside and puts Jake Steele into position and leaps off the top rope, both men flying through the air like birds until finally they go crashing through the announce table, Hollywood Mach connecting with his famous Macho Slam.
McNally: Holy shit Eddie did you just see that.
Edison: I did and don’t know how either of these two are going to get up from this.
RAF surveys the damage before beginning the count for both men.
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Hollywood Mach is stirring but Jake Steele appears to be out of it.
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Using the chair of Eddie Edison Hollywood is just about to his feet
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Hollywood reaches a somewhat solid base and promptly tells RAF to start Jake Steele’s count.
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Jake Steele is stirring but it appears as if he wont make it in time. The 11,200 that fill the PaloLottimatica are all yelling, trying to will Jake Steele to his feet, and on towards Omega Effect V
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Powered by the crowd Jake Steele is on one knee, trying, slowly, to get to his feet.
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Struggling to get their he reaches out and grabs Maxwell McNally
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Using the scruff of McNally’s shirt Jake Steele pulls himself to his feet, as RAF stops his count, the roof of the PaloAtlantico rattling as the crowd roars as Jake Steele stumbles away as Hollywood Mach can’t believe what he is seeing.
McNally: Folks you are witnessing one of the most courageous efforts we have ever seen here in Alpha Championship Wrestling.
Edison: Jake Steele refusing to give up after being hit with a car, slammed through a popcorn machine and now our announce table, truly showing the mettle that has made him ACW Champion.
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on May 17, 2009 15:42:25 GMT -5
Hollywood Mach grabs a hold of Jake Steele and slams him to the ground and yells at RAF to count him again which he does but this only gets him a six, truly showing how week Jake Steele is becoming at this point. Mach goes it again, throwing him into the wreck but once again only getting a six as Jake Steele refuses to give in. Hollywood Mach looks on but finally it appears as if he is ready to end it, that enough is enough. He charges Jake Steele and takes him down with a Lou Thesz press before destroying him with a number of right hands, a fury we have yet to see from Hollywood Mach is being unleashed on the skull of Jake Steele. After thirty blows Mach gets to his feet and you would think that that would be enough but isn’t instead Hollywood wants to make sure that Jake is unable to answer the call and grabs a hold of his legs before locking in his famous Texas Cloverleaf submission hold. Jake Steele’s face wrenched in agony as Mach tries to bend him in two. Jake Steele claws around but has no where to go, the savage rules of the Last Man Standing match biting him in the ass as Hollywood Mach tasted his own blood as it rolled down his nose towards his mouth, renewing his vigor as he leaned back even further, as Jake Steele appeared to be close to suffering the same fate as Chris Phenomenal did Monday, the pain becoming to much to consciously bear. After a couple minutes in the hold Hollywood finally let go as Jake Steele was slumped down as RAF was forced to once again continue the count.
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Jake Steele has managed to claw his way towards the barricade, outstretched hands of fans trying to help him to his feet.
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With the help of the fans Jake Steele is able to make it to his feet, the strain of the match showing on his face, his career probably having been already shortened by about five years during the course of the match.
McNally: How can one human endure so much.
Edison: It’s the heart of a champion, pumpin deep inside my veins, too much pride to be runnin. I'ma give what I can and more, even if my blood, my sweat, and my tears don't mean nothin’.
McNally: Thank You Nelly.
Jake Steele walks out of his corner, looking like he is out on his face and to further emphasize that point Mach takes his pointer finger, places it on the forehead of Jake Steele and is able to shove him back. That may not have been the best of moves for Hollywood though as Jake Steele comes back with a right of his own, and another as Mach is caught of guard, but not for long as he delivers a knee lift to the battered ribs of Jake Steele and then fires him into the ring before going back under the ring apron and pulling out something, and continues pulling until it finally comes out, a barb wire 2X4. Hollywood smiles as he slides the savage instrument of destruction into the ring as Jake Steele is using the ropes to pull himself to his feet. Hollywood slides into the ring and waits for Jake Steele, ready to end this once and for all with a Jabroni Buster. Jake backs up into it as Mach spins him around and lifts him up, but Jake Steele blocks it out of sheer instinct tucking the foot, and then connecting with a BOOMERANG onto the barb wire board as Hollywood grimaces in agony, the sharp points digging into his back. To make matters worse Jake Steele drags his carcass over Hollywood Mach and covers him for the fall, the extra body weight forcing Mach deeper into the barb wire board.
McNally: What the heck is Jake Steele doing.
Edison: He’s running purely on instinct Max and so he’s covering Hollywood, which might be costing him the match.
Jake Steele takes a few seconds before looking around for RAF who’s standing right above him, telling him he can’t win by pinning Mach. Jake slowly gets to his feet, as RAF starts the count for the Mach.
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Jake Steele backs away as he grabs a hold of a fluorescent light tube from the beginning of the match just in case Mach got to his feet.
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Hollywood is up against the ropes, not quite to a stable base but Jake Steele wastes no time, taking the light tube and smashing it across the face of Hollywood Mach the tube shattering on impact as Mach topples. Jake Steele rolls out side and grabs a table and slowly pulls it out, fatigue obviously haven’t long past set in as RAF is needlessly counting Mach out, who only needs six to get to a base but Jake has got the table in the ring but not set up. Jake snaps the neck of Mach on the top rope like a guillotine, allowing him enough time to crawl into the ring and set up the table in the corner. By that time however Hollywood is too his feet and takes out Jake Steele with a Samoan drop as he turns around, planting Jake Steele on his back onto the Barb wire board as now it is Jake Steele’s turn to groan in agony, and for Hollywood to add insult to injury looking to connect with a springboard moonsault but Jake rolls out the way as Hollywood lands on the board stomach first, Jake Steele not waiting to take control as he grabs the flash stick from before and sets it up near the ring post as Hollywood Mach tried to get to his feet beating the count but Jake Steele was ready connecting with a BIGGER BOOT that floored Hollywood Mach. Jake however also fell as finally he gave in to exhaustion, collapsing as RAF was forced to begin the count for both men as they tried to fight to the ropes.
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Jake Steele managed to crawl out of the ring as Hollywood was using the ropes to try and get up. Jake used the ropes to help support him as he pulled the legs out from Hollywood Mach again as he tried to get up and dragged him towards the corner with the flash stick attached to a board. Jake struggled but he dragged match their, and then eventually back into the flash stick, ball sack first as it explodes on impact, as Hollywood Mach yells in pain.
Edison: OMG
McNally: He just blew Hollywood up.
Jake Steele slides back into the ring as Hollywood Mach is down and RAF is counting Mach out.
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McNally: What the hell is HE doing out here?!
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Post by Alicia "Atomic" Kitsune on May 17, 2009 15:44:54 GMT -5
The crowd boos as ThunderKiss has slid into the ring and Jake Steele turns around right into GOODNIGHT KISS as RAF turns around and with Jake Steele now down begins the count for both men.
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Thunderkiss walks over towards Hollywood Mach and yells at him, telling him to get up, telling him he has the match won as Hollywood looks into his old foes eyes.
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Thunderkiss is still in the face of Hollywood as he tries to rise out of the wreckage, trying to will himself to his feet.
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Edison: Thunderkiss appears as if he has won the match for Hollywood as Jake Steele is out cold.
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McNally: Why though, why?
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That is answered as Hollywood tries to get up but Thunderkiss will have none of it as he connects with a gigton punch knocking Hollywood out cold.
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RING THE BELL!
The bell rings as the crowd boos Thunderkiss who can’t help but smile as he walks over to the announce table and grabs the title belt from the table.
Jones: Ladies and Gentleman this match has been declared a double knockout, and as a result STILL ACW WORLD CHAMPION…JAKE STEELE.
Thunderkiss rolls back into the ring and looks at that title belt before placing it high above his head and pointing at the Omega Effect V banner hanging in the rafters. Spring into Hell goes off the air as Thunderkiss lays the title belt over the laid out carcass of Jake Steele.
And thus endeth the lesson. Challenges have been met.... and even fiercer ones made in their place.
The entire roster must now prepare, not only for the biggest show of the year, but possibly the biggest show ever to bear the ACW name.
Five weeks and counting. It’s going to be a wild ride... strap yourselves in. We’re going back to where it all began.
Fade to Black.
End of Show.
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Post by rosslambert on May 17, 2009 15:45:46 GMT -5
This show = Win.
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Post by lee on May 17, 2009 15:54:03 GMT -5
The Reverse Cage Match and TK vs. AJ were full of win. Great examples of matches that go beyond simply combat, as there were great stories being told in the ring as well. Those are really the kind I enjoy reading. And I'd never thought I'd say this about a Freeman storyline, but this one was really good. And Lee loses again = . Not so fun fact: Lee is no 0-4 in PPV matches. Not even Nick Durden had this sad of a record.
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Post by rosslambert on May 17, 2009 16:00:14 GMT -5
The Reverse Cage Match and TK vs. AJ were full of win. Great examples of matches that go beyond simply combat, as there were great stories being told in the ring as well. Those are really the kind I enjoy reading. And I'd never thought I'd say this about a Freeman storyline, but this one was really good. And Lee loses again = . Not so fun fact: Lee is no 0-4 in PPV matches. Not even Nick Durden had this sad of a record. You'll get a win eventually... just keep faithful.
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Post by El Shadowo on May 17, 2009 16:06:51 GMT -5
From the predictions topic, quoting myself <_< *reads result and wonders* Got the first part right I've read about half the show so far and OE is shaping up to be one hell of a card More feedback to come in a while.
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Post by VorteX on May 17, 2009 16:11:06 GMT -5
Have to read the show (still on first page), but want to make a comment about losing. Don't get frustrated when you lose, or you'll end up self-destructing like I did, which helps no one. In fact I took the stance that I don't keep a W/L in my signature anymore, because when I did it only irritated me because I had more losses than wins (I believe AK gave me this advice).
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Post by Dan White on May 17, 2009 16:24:41 GMT -5
I know we're not meant to have off-topic posting on show topics, but this place isn't really about winning or losing. Sure, you'd rather win than lose but just being able to collaborate with someone else and write a kickarse feud is really feelgood, I find.
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Post by Kim Jong CP on May 17, 2009 16:26:00 GMT -5
The Reverse Cage Match and TK vs. AJ were full of win. Great examples of matches that go beyond simply combat, as there were great stories being told in the ring as well. Those are really the kind I enjoy reading. And I'd never thought I'd say this about a Freeman storyline, but this one was really good. And Lee loses again = . Not so fun fact: Lee is no 0-4 in PPV matches. Not even Nick Durden had this sad of a record. You'll get a win eventually... just keep faithful. Not if he keeps facing me Seriously though, anyone looking for a good solid feud, hit Lee up. Great all around guy, who will for sure get a win, and probably the IN title before me.
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Post by TWMoney on May 17, 2009 17:40:31 GMT -5
is it me or was my segement not in there :-O
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Post by Kim Jong CP on May 17, 2009 18:34:45 GMT -5
I saw your segment Wayde, I think middle of page four
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Post by Kim Jong CP on May 17, 2009 20:06:50 GMT -5
CP Feedback
-I like reading the shows and then posting feedback, and this is one of the reasons why. Usually this segment by Senator would have left me confused and I may not have liked it as much as I did after skimming the show. However reading it after really allowed me to appreciate this segment. Senator isn’t flashy but he really gets the job done creating a good story line. I got a little more to say but I’ll save that for TK’s segment
-I’m going to be blunt and say I didn’t understand this segment. Well written and I did enjoy it, it felt like I was reading a Dresden Novel (cheap plug for an awesome series) however when nothing really followed up on it in the show I was left a little disappointed. I do hope however that this is a continuing story arc as I’ll be disappointed if it isn’t.
-Train, Train, Train. Nothing against anyone else, but Train is the funniest writer in this fed, although it may be because we are of the same age. Nothing seems set up and overly planned, it just pops out of no where and you laugh. It’s seen later with Mainer, and in this segment as well. Props to Train for allowing me to tag along on this little story. Now we need Captain Wales >_>
-I read Vortex’s match, and then I went back and read his first match and the improvement is marked. There is still some room to grow, but in that span of time, I want to say well done, and give you a thumbs up (we need a thumbs up smiley Jonny)
-I was wondering after skimming the match when the show was being posted how Black winning was going to pan out. At first I hoped it was going to be the return of Fallout for the summer, but this worked just as good, and I think added a bit more badassery to the Andrew Black character, something I really wasn’t buying at all before hand. If he’s shooting to be the biggest bad ass he’s still got some ways to go, but he’s slowly gaining some ground.
-Everyone really likes Lee’s off the air segments, and I’m one of them. However if he were to write one segment like this a show I’d be even happier. Him using Sleepy Hollow as a backdrop of sorts really brought me in right away, and held me the entire time. We’re not done yet buddy, not by a long shot.
-I wasn’t expecting a lot from this match, like it was said in chat I was expecting some big swerve (the abundance of Sarin as of late I was thinkin’ she might be returning.) TK did a good job with this match, keeping it short to hold my attention which I think a long match may have lost and the non swerve, swerve ending was a nice touch. Kudos to Rena as well for helping in this feud as it really did wonders for TK’s angle with Fakden, and also was a nice way to really bring her (him, you people playing off gender characters confuse me as to what to put) back
-I’m not really sure what to say on this as I don’t know anything about Grindhouse. If TK/someone would care to enlighten me, either via MSN, PM or In this topic in their feedback (another cheap plug) I’d be grateful.
-Bye X, I really think the way you ended everything it really was good. I’d like to thank you for the few times we worked, and best of luck with Hitman,
-Good work by Rep and Vortex here, although I think if Mew showed up and wrote a bit more things would have been a lot better. Props to Rep for creating a solid build, and taking it right into his next feud.
-I’m going to combine the two Pablo Crisis segments, and say top work to Lee. I liked your other two segments better, but I think of all your stories, The Pablo Crisis has been the one I’ve enjoyed the most.
-I enjoyed Henry McKaye’s work, but I always felt there was something that led me to believe he had more. When I read BK’s autobiography and he talked about Adrian’s work and I saw him coming back I was excited. Reading his stuff this show and I can see why BK had nothing but praise for him. This was some excellent excellent work, and as I think Senator said in the chat room, Mickey is already the best manager in ACW, even though IIRC he’s really the only manager heavily used in segments.
-Not a hugely long match by Dalton, but it served it’s purpose against an NPC Team. I would have liked maybe a bit of offence from the Drinkin’s and maybe one spot instead of an absolute squash though. I once again would like to take this opportunity to petition people to form a tag team with someone, to make it so the belts aren’t defended against NPC’s week in week out. Even if you have to adopt a NPC as a partner, it gives you extra characters to use in your writing.
-Decent enough segment by Andrew Black, although after his segment earlier, this one kind of left me a little disappointed. Some of his segments are hit and miss with me, but I think he has some potential in there. If you don’t have anything planned for OEV look at my feud in the ACW as I think the right feud could really help give you that push into making some really high quality segments.
-Dave makes me laugh again but I don’t envision his character as the one that should make me laugh which is my main gripe. Face Dave for sure, but serious Dave shouldn’t unless it’s like serious Jericho. This is just my opinion on the character. Good segment though Dave.
-Flamingo steps right back up to the plate and goes back to back. I really liked his first one, and this one was even better. He asked what I wanted done with the character and he fit it into the framework of the segment, as he did with everyone without them betraying their characters, but also letting their hair down a bit.
-I can’t wait to see more of Lee’s segments set in the real time. He really is good at taking something not related to wrestling and applying it, using metaphors in his writing which really sets him apart when compared to some of the other writers in the fed.
-So AK says Freeman wrote this by himself, (even though some of us have our doubts). The segment was okay, for a solo segment it was well written, and gave an insight into the mind of Freeman but there was a lot more than could have been done later in this show to have made this segment more, (much the same as Senny’s segment was improved by events later in the show) and that onus really falls on Freeman. It was a decent feud, one I’ve been critical of due to the lack of Freeman and I really hope Freeman picks up his game more for the AK portion of the feud then the Latino portion as this left me disappointed as it had the potential to be far greater than it was. I really felt AK and Latino carried this feud, (something I don’t often see a lot in this fed as I think most people do really equal work) and the work they did (whether it’s credited to them or not) really made this feud what it ended up being. Mad ups to AK for showing once again why she is the Goddess of E-Fedding and to Latino for showing me as a new comer what made him revered (even if it was in a small sample.)
I’d like to take this section to say something to Freeman though, and I know it should probably be said to him on MSN, but that doesn’t seem to work for him so I’m hoping that a public setting might give him that drive. This is in no way meant to be an attack on him, more so an attempt to try and help him, to give him that push to try and allow him to reach the potential a number of people have said he has.
I talked to Freeman on MSN once or twice and offered suggestions, and I was a little bit annoyed, not that none of them were used by him, but that he did nothing at all. I know other people aside from myself really tried to help him make this feud into something that would have really torn the roof down. For Spring into Hell as a whole there wasn‘t a really standout feud (TK vs. Fakden stood out, but it wasn’t a feud between two people so to speak) that had me waiting to see the next bit, (like XS3 vs. Jake and the whole Dan White thing last month did). It was wide open for someone to steal the spotlight (which I hope me and Lee did) and the opportunity presented to Freeman was vast and there was so much he could have done with this to really put the fed on notice that he was ready and he dropped the ball. AK and Latino gave him a lot to work with and he didn’t take it, TK, myself and I don’t know who else gave you tons of ideas, and non were implemented in the least, and it wasn’t because you had better things to work with. I hate to say it, and I don’t know if it’s my place but looking back at some of the shows over the past, I see this upcoming feud with AK as a make or break one for the Freeman character and your reputation in this fed. A poor showing and I don’t think You ever make it any further, if you ace it, you immediately set yourself up for a really good shot at winning EOTR. The power is in your hands Freeman, if you want to write a segment with me let me know and we can work on things, but if this goes down the tank, I know a lot of people will feel really cheated. It’s blunt, but it’s the truth.
-I wasn’t around for Raj but this segment gave me a good look into the emotions that went into it. A good segment by two veterans who, no matter what may happen deep down have respect for each other. Good segment by Mark and Teeks, and I look forward to the future with TK Jake and Senny
-Really good segment by Adrian that really explains how he left ACW and why’s he back, as well as putting an extra little bit that adds onto his previous segments. Like Senator and Lee I really think I’m going to enjoy Adrian’s work as he builds from segment to segment as opposed to sporadic bouncing around with no purpose.
-When I saw AK was writing the street fight it gave me the extra motivation to make my match, and the rest of the Main Event that much better to try and compete. Once again I really, really enjoyed it, and I’d like to thank you for pushing me to become a better and better match writer.
-I’m not certain on this match, as I kinda see it as a screen that flips between each person as signified by the -- separating the lines. If that’s how it is kudos, if not then I really don’t know what was going on here as it didn’t make sense otherwise.
-TK said something earlier this morning on MSN about Believe in Me Again and I didn’t get it, and yet I laughed when I saw the title and this was a really good segment that already helped start the build for Spring Into Hell. Great job by TK to start things off on the final push for OEV.
-I missed you Dan. Whilst it wasn’t the greatest segment we’ve seen from you it did a good job of setting up the match as well as setting things up for his future, whatever that may be.
-I joined GWF for two weeks, and it was in part because of Dave’s match writing ability. It carried over to CIW which I fully enjoyed and now once again his match writing shined. Quality match from Dave here that really showed the emotion that was present in the match. Top work Dave.
-Two months ago I was really excited for Snake vs. Torak. That excitement dimmed as Snake fell off due to personal issues but this segment renewed some of that excitement. It was really good to see this feud not getting 3MR’d.
-Welcome back Adrian Flamingo. I really like the difference between the manager and wrestler and I hope this return lasts more than the summer. I really enjoyed this segment and (ready for another cheap plug) hope we can really work on a segment or two over the next bit leading into OEV.
-A solid match by Mark here considering the circumstances as I know how tough it must have been to write this match considering his situation. I missed the commentary a bit as I feel it adds to a match, but for what I got it was a solid match.
-Really excited for LyCos, I’m going to wait a segment or two to really give this character a solid review so as I can have a better feel of where he is at. Potential is here though.
-AK with the segment of the night here. I’ve never heard that tale before, and actually want to read the entire thing and I think it was cleverly applied here. The figure of speech bit made me chuckle without even knowing the reason for AK having these powers, as with the Grindhouse bit if someone would care to explain it, or at least direct me to the time frame then I’d really like to read up on this.
-Really good ending to the Fakden storyline. I was worried it was going to be something really fantasy esque but the Merc bit was solid, as well as everything coming back to Senator. This feud is going to be really, really interesting considering the build it’s had since I got here. Big props to these two for a slow build.
-Love the segment by Dave and Train, to start them on their road to Omega Effect Here. I don’t think I would have liked The Candyman line from anyone other than Train but it worked. I really like the way the title feuds are really shaping up, especially if mine works out how I’ve envisioned it to. My one gripe being the fact that it spoiled the result of their match in a way. If Mainer had say one, and then lost it back to Train two weeks later that would have been a real shocker that probably would have worked.
-Short abbreviated match from Rattlesnake and it works out here. I was really, really hoping for a big rock ‘em, sock ‘em affair and felt a little cheated by it on the first go around. However on my re read I liked it a lot more for what it was and that was to bring a close to their entire storyline.
-Once again something I’ve found I like about ACW is the way that a lot of people build up their match the segment before it. It’s something I struggled with before ACW and I feel I’ve really improved in that area so thank you all. Good work by Train and Mainer here to build it up.’
-Really good match when judged by itself but a lot of other matches out did this one. It served as a good way to bring an end to this solid feud which seemed to be based a little more on the comedy elements which in a way brought a change of pace to SIH so kudos to them for trying something different.
-Can’t wait for this Crucible match, and good to see where the name comes from. Good use of Gingers love of money Mainer to get into his heart and get what you want. Excellent work from a crafty writer.
-FFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUU I finally had Journey out of my head and then you go and do that and put it back in.
-HEEETTMAAAWWWNN, good to see you’re not leaving us Mark. I can’t wait to see the Hitman character and adding another big guy to the roster which is something we’ve really been missing.
-Thanks to all for writing for this show, but I want to say something to two people, Hollywood and Jake Steele. I really missed out on your work as their’s always stuff that makes me chuckle and really brings me deeper into the show. If you were both extremely busy ALL WEEK (which in Mach’s case I think was the case) I aplogize for these remarks but I feel as if the fed was let down by the two people in the main event not contributing a single segment to this weeks show. I know Jake was injured but I would have liked to have seen a segment from him to build that up as the stagger in entrance looked a little week without any prior build. As far as Mach goes there was so much he could have worked with to really add the extra to that feud that was needed to really make this more memorable than it was. I look forward to both of you rebounding as we head into Omega Effect V!
SIH Month MVP:
Solid work from a lot of people during the short month to make things exceptional. Mainer and Train did a really good job of adding to their feud in non conventional methods. Dan and Dave did a really good job of making an interesting story come out of Fallen Heroes, but really there is only one person this can go to and that is Thunderkiss. His work with the Rena feud and the Fakden feud were extraordinary and as I said I was waiting each week for the next installment. Thank you TK for some exceptional reads, and thanks again for the ending to my match. Due to Banner restrictions, I can’t make you a banner but if anyone has any ideas for what I can do to “honor” this award, please let me know.
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VorteX
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Post by VorteX on May 17, 2009 20:35:07 GMT -5
I just wanted to note that the Winters segment is mine at the beginning of the show and I meant to add more, but ran out of time this week. This weeks and last weeks segment are leading up to something, so bear with me ;D.
Now for some feedback of my own:
- I'm really starting to enjoy Senator's heel turn, especially now that TK is involved. I can't wait to see where this one goes as OE nears.
- Great match by Lee and Chris, and with all of this head trauma CP is enduring I wonder if the first segment was a hallucination or not, either way I'm interested.
- I think the Freeman / AK feud is shaping up nicely, and the street fight match was well done. The little swerve with Freeman trying to kidnap Charlotte mistakenly was cool, I have a feeling more cool stuff is ahead.
EDIT: I wanted to note something else here. Despite reading CP's paragraph on how Freeman didn't take advice, I still think the feud is shaping up nicely. Sure it may not be "AK vs. Starkweather" epic, but it's decent enough...whether this be due to greatness by association or not. At first I was worried, but any feud that involves the people I remember most (AK, Latino, Hunter (if he was still here), Stark (likewise), Snake, Torak, etc.) has my interest, so I hope Freeman runs with this, because it is really a big deal.
- The TK/Fakden feud has always been brutal, but tonight it went to another level. The match itself showed how much these two dislike eachother, and the introduction of Grindhouse and Senator's involvement really adds to the feud.
- The Lycos character seems like it could work out well, although I'm going to wait for a few more character building segments before commenting further.
- Great to see Flamingo back and sad to see XS3 go, although Hitman is back which is awesome.
- Torak vs. Snake kept my interest, although I've missed quite a bit of the feud so I'm probably not getting all the emotional impact. When I get time I'll have to go back and read what lead up to the match.
I still have to read the remainder of the show, including the last two matches...but from what I've read the quality is great as always.
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