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Post by Dan White on Jan 13, 2009 3:07:01 GMT -5
So around the time of October-November, I proper slacked off, but I got back on my feet to pretty much write like a workhouse could if it was able to write. The problem I feel is that whilst I churn out an average of 4 segments a show, I feel like my segments are fairly similar, and I'd like to get some feedback on that, as well as my writing in general.
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Post by Dan White on Jan 15, 2009 11:52:31 GMT -5
Doo doo doo
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Post by Jack Jefferson on Jan 16, 2009 13:29:10 GMT -5
After reading the last show I must admit I enjoyed your segments a lot, your interactions with XS3 were good and I could really feel the character coming through.
If I'm honest, it feels like you're getting back to the height of your powers again (writing-wise) because back in the ol' days Dan White was a force to be reckoned with. I feel that in the not-so-recent past this feeling has been lost a little and you'd slipped down the pecking order. Now, however, it seems like you might be getting back to where you were before.
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Post by jonnyomega on Jan 16, 2009 16:08:02 GMT -5
I hate you Dan.
How's that for feedback?
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Post by Dan White on Jan 16, 2009 16:40:22 GMT -5
You don't hate me. You loved my Muhammed Ali impression
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Post by Jake Steele on Jan 16, 2009 16:46:35 GMT -5
"I float like a buttahfly and buzz like a bee, mate!" >_> I'm feeling getting around to this. I kind of agree with what Jefferson said, on some parts. During our feud I didn't feel like you were someone who I wouldn't back down from, but then again Steele doesn't back down from anyone  I do like that you were moreso the edgy face who said whatever he wanted, and did whatever he wanted too. Now I feel like the ruthless side is coming out, and now that you've added some color to your promos I think the Dan White character has some more style to himself now as well. I'm really looking forward to where this feud with X leads to for Dan White, and honestly I say keep up the good work. |
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Post by jonnyomega on Jan 16, 2009 17:08:25 GMT -5
"I float like a buttahfly and buzz like a bee, mate!" >_> I'm feeling getting around to this. I kind of agree with what Jefferson said, on some parts. During our feud I didn't feel like you were someone who I wouldn't back down from, but then again Steele doesn't back down from anyone I do like that you were moreso the edgy face who said whatever he wanted, and did whatever he wanted too. Now I feel like the ruthless side is coming out, and now that you've added some color to your promos I think the Dan White character has some more style to himself now as well. I'm really looking forward to where this feud with X leads to for Dan White, and honestly I say keep up the good work. It wasn't a proper Ali impression, it was based around his Parkinson's. |
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Post by Dan White on Jan 16, 2009 17:23:37 GMT -5
You did it as well
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Post by jonnyomega on Jan 16, 2009 17:54:28 GMT -5
I didn't say I didn't also perform the impression, I just explained it.
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Post by rosslambert on Feb 1, 2009 6:14:19 GMT -5
"I float like a buttahfly and buzz like a bee, mate!" >_> I'm feeling getting around to this. I kind of agree with what Jefferson said, on some parts. During our feud I didn't feel like you were someone who I wouldn't back down from, but then again Steele doesn't back down from anyone I do like that you were moreso the edgy face who said whatever he wanted, and did whatever he wanted too. Now I feel like the ruthless side is coming out, and now that you've added some color to your promos I think the Dan White character has some more style to himself now as well. I'm really looking forward to where this feud with X leads to for Dan White, and honestly I say keep up the good work. It wasn't a proper Ali impression, it was based around his Parkinson's. "Dancing like I'm Michael J. Fox, with Parkinsons." |
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I do like that you were moreso the edgy face who said whatever he wanted, and did whatever he wanted too. Now I feel like the ruthless side is coming out, and now that you've added some color to your promos I think the Dan White character has some more style to himself now as well.