criminal
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Ohh that was ur girl... I thought i reconized her!!
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Post by criminal on Nov 19, 2009 22:59:52 GMT -5
the feedback is much appreciative and will be taken into consideration, however the other name of criminal will not be exposed as of yet, there is a long storyline about the charactoristic of criminal that everyone will learn as time progresses. I'm holding back a lot because as of now it is kinda pointless to use my good ideas against the NPC's. as of now my charactor is still that of a mystery
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TJ
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I LOVE DAN WHITE
Good, you're working out Freeman....you're gonna need to
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Post by TJ on Nov 19, 2009 23:02:56 GMT -5
all this feedback makes me happy for two weeks!
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TJ
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I LOVE DAN WHITE
Good, you're working out Freeman....you're gonna need to
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Post by TJ on Nov 19, 2009 23:07:53 GMT -5
the feedback is much appreciative and will be taken into consideration, however the other name of criminal will not be exposed as of yet, there is a long storyline about the charactoristic of criminal that everyone will learn as time progresses. I'm holding back a lot because as of now it is kinda pointless to use my good ideas against the NPC's. as of now my charactor is still that of a mystery STROOOOOONGGGGLLLLLLY DISAGREE! Maybe it's just me, but the point to being new is to give some insight so when you get actual matches, your opponents can get something other than you being undefeated, which, like CP said, is nice and all, but imo, it means squat because it's not here, it's other places.
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VorteX
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Stay a while...and listen.
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Post by VorteX on Nov 20, 2009 0:04:34 GMT -5
I believe you can keep a certain 'mystique' about your character and still write good stuff. I do agree that some stuff needs to be told though, otherwise we really have nothing to go off of. You could do something similar to Trent and that is reveal little by little but not everything right away.
To be honest I haven't told everything about my character yet, although that's partly do to me stretching out the story because of complexity issues.
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Post by Kim Jong CP on Nov 20, 2009 0:07:16 GMT -5
I believe you can keep a certain 'mystique' about your character and still write good stuff. I do agree that some stuff needs to be told though, otherwise we really have nothing to go off of. You could do something similar to Trent and that is reveal little by little but not everything right away. To be honest I haven't told everything about my character yet, although that's partly do to me stretching out the story because of complexity issues. I agree with teX. Like I said you need to give something but you need not give it all. There's enough about Chris that is out there that people can get a direction on him, but I've also left myself enough room for my own.
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Post by The Red Panther on Nov 20, 2009 11:36:59 GMT -5
I agree, you need to tell something. Although I myself am guilty of that, I put some deep stuff in my profile about his early life but it was only mentioned in one RP.
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Jason Freeman
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Post by Jason Freeman on Nov 21, 2009 1:21:11 GMT -5
VorteX, I dunno. I feel on one hand yeah, your storyline is kind of confusing, but maybe that's because when I was like two months behind I had to read a lot of shows in a row and ended up not really taking in some segments. I feel kinda lost with your storyline, but that's my fault, not yours. I tend to skim some of your stuff because I am confused what's going on and who everybody is but that's my fault. Is there a summary in your profile? If there isnt it'd be a good idea to put one there so people like me could remind themselves of everything.
But actually, what I was referring to was just the character. I dunno, like something about it. I cant get a grip on it. Like with Shadow, with CP, with Senator, etc, I know what that character is like. I know their personality, I know what makes them do the things they do. With VorteX, I feel like I cant get a grip on what his personality is. Or what his character is. I dunno, something about it I have a hard time figuring out what VorteX is all about.
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Post by Kim Jong CP on Nov 21, 2009 10:36:46 GMT -5
VorteX, I dunno. I feel on one hand yeah, your storyline is kind of confusing, but maybe that's because when I was like two months behind I had to read a lot of shows in a row and ended up not really taking in some segments. I feel kinda lost with your storyline, but that's my fault, not yours. I tend to skim some of your stuff because I am confused what's going on and who everybody is but that's my fault. Is there a summary in your profile? If there isnt it'd be a good idea to put one there so people like me could remind themselves of everything. But actually, what I was referring to was just the character. I dunno, like something about it. I cant get a grip on it. Like with Shadow, with CP, with Senator, etc, I know what that character is like. I know their personality, I know what makes them do the things they do. With VorteX, I feel like I cant get a grip on what his personality is. Or what his character is. I dunno, something about it I have a hard time figuring out what VorteX is all about. I hope I'm correct here teX, so please correct me if I'm wrong, but that's always what I've felt his character to be. He's that mystery loner type guy, but not an identical Raven clone that those guys usually take which is why I love teX even if some of his shit confuses me (again, not his fault, some of us just aren't that smart.)
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VorteX
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Post by VorteX on Nov 21, 2009 15:24:30 GMT -5
You could compare me to Raven in a way, with the 'mind games' at least. I do have a summary in my profile, however it needs to be updated as I have done quite a bit since I wrote that. The main thing with Vortex is that he takes split personality disorder to a new level (if you have seen Fight Club, what I write about is quite similar) as he basically can see his primal instinct and it can force him to do things (think an imaginary friend but malicious). The other stuff with Abel, Winters, and Felicity is more on the background of this problem and how to fix it...with quite a lot of sci-fi stuff thrown in. I do appreciate the feedback as I am trying to get this to a point to where it is readable and I am happy with it. Also I want to keep it reasonably wrestling related, which is why I have eased off of the background stuff lately and focused more on the ET title.
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Post by The Senator on Nov 23, 2009 1:32:01 GMT -5
I must add to the feedback here to say that the main event match was indeed epic. There's some good feuds brewing, too.
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